I want to take you to a magical land
with pink unicorns and a marching band.
Here there's candy, magic, and tons of rides,
bright-colored packages with toys inside.
Harmonious music fills the sweet air.
This sweetness is just too much to bear!
I can't stand the joy and the harmony;
I need chaos, destruction, and misery!
I need to get out of this heavenly world
for this is the nightmare of one little girl.
But there's no way out of this enclosed cell,
so I'm stuck for eternity in my hell.
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Written December 2nd, 2005
A contest entry
- You Choose! by Foreverlord.
400 points, ended December 21, 2005, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
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I like the rhyme scheme. Its a really cute poem.
I like it.
-Mia -
I very much enjoyed all the imagery of things the world categorizes as bright and happy juxtaposed to be your personal hell. Sweet ! ~Jim
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I love it. You spread out the message that just cuz its all happy and perky doesnt mean its good. Nice rhymin and everything. I like it. I vote this one!
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very well done everything rymes and its unusual i really like that
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