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I can see everything untold

Looking into your eyes
I can see everything untold
I know you aren't happy
But you never wanna grow old
I can see your mistakes
And how you long to take them back
I know you didn't plan for things to be this way
But now that they are you don't know how to act
I can see the life you planned
And all the dreams you had
But after you took that hit
Everything went bad
I know inside your hurting
and I wish I could heal your pain
I know sometimes you think everything's wrong
And your not even sane
But even when your sad and down
I will always be there for you
To erase your frown
To dry up your tears and help you live another day
Trust me
I wanna show you that there is another way

Author notes

First thing I have wrote in a month and I am back on ap again for good so I will be writing alot.
I missed yall.
Written December 2nd, 2005

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  • Piece 2 My Puzzle
    May 9, 2006
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    Good write..


  • flamingsoul
    May 6, 2006
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    good write, it's rare to see poetry with a final message of hope and loyalty. the last line especially shows a caring and compassionate heart. keep up the good work

  • Kickz127
    March 8, 2006
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    this is really awesome great write can tell it came from the heart. thats the kind of friend everybody needs. keep it up


  • December 13, 2005
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    :)

    I see you haven't changed...just as beautiful as always; just as I remembered.

    But with so much more confidence and authority. Grab my mind, and lead me away into this world you weave, and as things may. How long has it been since we last conversed? And I was enthralled in another inspiring verse?

    Welcome back, young vixen.

  • lawlor802000
    December 3, 2005
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    damn girl...lol thats a really emotional poem i loved it..yeah i wrote a couple poems to and a song also..but thats a really good poem and very beautiful, just like you

    Luv,
    Mike

  • Broken-Bones
    December 3, 2005
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    This was really good , I liked the idea of still knowing what this person was feeling even though these things are untold. thats a sign of true friendship i guess. I loved the lines:
    "I know inside your hurting
    and I wish I could heal your pain"
    I also really liked the idea of erasing the frown and how you put Trust me on a line all on its own. It was a really caring and loving piece. Really nice work x

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