Power and defeat i must not have. Power I can kill. Defeat I will be kill. Killing thoughs that I love, hate, and care for dearly. Being killed I save those. Having power I can kiss the lips of my lover once more before my change is complete. Bing defeated, he will never have to see my evil transformation. One way or a another I loose the ones I love, and my life. At this point neither God's grace nor mercy can help me. I am doomed to death and evil. Anyway I turn i have only minutes to really live. How will i spend it?
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Written December 2nd, 2005
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I liked this. I do think that it has alot of spelling errors, but it still has a good point. maybe try re-formatting it like this:
Power and defeat I must not have
Power I can kill
Defeat I will be killed...
It makes it flow a little better.
I still think that the idea of this poem is awesome, and I think you did a good job. -
You may want to spend some time editing this down Meagan i know but you use a lil to many words to make your point maybe ya wanan tryto make it a lil shorter but goodjob anyway -william
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