There was once a poor little girl in a country far away,
she was not the prettiest nor the ugliest around.
Dreamt of a place with more luxury were she could stay,
but she had no means to leave this cursed ground,
He was a boy of a quite standard issue,
unhappy in love life and female reaction
His sex-life always ended in a tissue,
the geographic location made her feel attraction
Technology and Internet became her solution,
she entered this new world with excitement and cries
She filled a person on the other side with pollution,
wicked snares of tell tales of love and lies
The poor soul felt something he thought was love in sight,
spent hours in front of a picture moderated by light
She was his heart's captor he booked quickly a flight,
he carried her picture loosing it became his worst fright
She arrived the airport as a queen full of obsession
he so ensnared he madly danced love and hugs all around
She threw a glance at her new possession,
he in front of her feet at the ground
Quickly she led him until he the church found,
she wedded and bedded him in such a fury 9 times in a row
He mistook this for genuine emotion and love all around,
all she wanted was for the stomach to grow
An apartment was found as a love nest for her,
he filled it with all needed for comfort of life
But she craved more she was in heaven my dear,
so her ever growing needs made living a strife
Money my dear is what loves is about,
he said he had given her it all
She reacted with cries and shout,
and the bedroom door became shut
Then a little child to this world entered,
she was granted a passport and citizen became.
Hope was now that the child was centered'
she was not satisfied at all and gave him the blame
He was thrown out of the love nest he had built,
and back back to loneliness and dreams ending in tissue
she now had all of her dreams and felt no guilt
that she had abused love was of no concern or issue
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Written December 2nd, 2005
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well i wouldnt write it if i didnt like one of them. But to answer you on the easy way, the girl i detest. She reminds me of all in life i fight against both as a man, romantic, dramer etc. So does that answer you well enough?
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well i am in a happy ralationship so this had nothing to do to me at all. Its is just the true story of someone i know. And i felt like writing about it
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I am glad I do not know neither the girl or the boy in this poem, d-amour. The way you describe them make me think that you do not like either of them very much, but especially not the girl... why would that be?
Good rhymes, though! 
Jim
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sorry it took me so long to check this out, we just got our internet back on a couple of days ago
this is an excellent poem, the flow is steady and the story is great, sad but great. we've all heard stories similar to these and you've done an excellent job at illustrating it. two thumbs up
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Very good work, but is it fact based?
d-amour, If this is personal to yourself I'm sorry it happened, if you are speaking of someone else it sounds a little harsh. I have been married for many years and no it was not a relationship found on the internet. I do have some friends that have found love that way and they are very happy indeed. Again if it is you, I suggest seeking resources that will help you with not only visitation, but also think about the relationship. Did you give it a chance? I don't mean to sound so critical, it is not a bad write. Just the nature of the work itself. If it is not you and is a friend you should discuss things with your friend before doing something like this. Just my humble opinion. Solid write and I hope you can work things out for yourself or with this friend if that is the case. Love and blessings for you, today and always. Remember, keep smiling you never know who's watching.
Joyce
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Reminds me of my ex wife. Not that I am a woman hater or anything,but I gave her everything and I guess she thought the grass was greener on the other side of the fence lol
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WOW! Excellent! I love this poem! The rhyme is great, the images are so very real, and, the best thing is the story. It is so very possible, it's sad, but this happens, and you described it beautifully!
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wow. I had this happen to a friend who was a soldier and married a woman from germany. She also quickly became pregnant and tossed him out, also moving around several times to keep their daughter from him. What a bitch. - I loved this write!- Harper
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Poor guy, I wish him all the joy he can get
^^ your a fast writer I won't be able to read all your poems -
i am happy to tell its not about me, but its the true story of somone i know about...unfortunately
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Sorry for being late ^^
This is a really cruel story. I feel sad and ashamed for the poor guy (is it you? or a friend?), and pity for the girl because she doesn't know what true love is. She maybe doesn't even love her kid.
Like the missin truth told you, some words could be switched, sometimes it's a bit harsh to read. It doesn't flow as smoothly as your other poems but it would be boring to always do the same thing
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got your message...letse...wow...it's eally good and really sad. I'm sorry. But it just proves that true love for some is only a dream and an illusion--just meant to be shattered once you feel it for once...This poem reflects on this. very good. very sad. i applaud
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Thanks for the nice comment on this piece. I hope to see you on my work in the future
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it is all to true my friend. that is the sad sad part.
thanks for visitng:-)
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Intriguing write. She must have been a vampire, the emotional kind I mean. Anyway, the meter is all over the place, but it's a clever story, and even sadder if true. Hopefully it isn't true.
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Nice story, especially with the two backgrounds of each character....do I know you somehow? Because you sent me an IM and I'm not sure if you IM-ed me on purpose or on accident...
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this is crazily weird and confusing to my head...ummm i hate that girl you talk about, but it`s a nice tale. she`s so cruel!!! poor lil man... 
well worded and I admire the fact people can write stories that actually rhyme! i suck with rhymes... so yes, gret job here, it is the case of many people to fall in love with oversea or other country people *cries* and it makes them miserable and want to kill themselves... except the case of the girl or guy ruining the otehr person and using him/her i think is less frequent...anyway, nice write and please don`t start stalker me so that i read all your poems... but i probably will
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great/sad story
very nice story. i think a few words can be switched to read a lil smoother. but then again i dont know your first dialect so that could be how you articulate. like loveboots i wonder about the child...could there maybe be a sequil to come?
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I really like the story you tell here, although it's very sad. It makes me wonder what that child would be brought up to be like! Good luck in the contest.
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Aww a sad piece but a story well told and very relatable for many. Bravo on this, written with great flow and rhyme
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What a fantastic story is this! And you've managed to find a rhyming meter in the telling of it! Great story and exquisite work.Keep the ink flowing Poet!~~~~Suseann
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