Define my body
With letters written in cursive.
Cross all the T's on my backside
And dot all the I's of my spine.
Litter my walkway with pity.
Lead me through peepholes of hope.
Comb back my anger.
Pin my conscience to the floor.
Stir me like a cauldron
And clench
Your
Favorite
Part.
Define my mind
With words that taste like intelligence.
Color my heart with crayons that crawl
To the light at the end of the tunnel.
Follow my footprints.
Look through my eyes.
Sit in my shadow
And listen for love.
Pitter my patter.
Mix folly with fire.
Fiddle my faddle
And sip
The
Sweet
Nectar.
Define my soul
With epics of cosmical lore.
Draw me a boat made of silver.
Blend me into my surroundings.
Whisper me your memories.
Sew them to my ear.
Then kiss my invisible forehead
And spill into my lap.
Fall without gravity
And glide
Like
You're
Not
Even
There.
Author notes
almost embarrassed.... (but probably not in the way you're thinking)
Written December 2nd, 2005
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wow.. very good write... incredibly sensual... but i am confused as to what it is about... it is very good with brilliant language and form.. but..
i loved it though
jess -
I'm embarrassed too...because I am left confused. I do think you are an awesome writer...I'm just a sucky interpreter of stuff like this. Write on.
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Interesting and strangely beckoning write...I am drawn by your crayons that crawl...
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Interesting form - fiddle my faddle? Quite unique this expression is. Quite a different title as well - picture makes one ponder - deep.
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Well, frankly this isn't your best, but then again I may be prejudiced as I am not a big fan of most prose. But this is pretty good. I would probably put, "sip the sweet nectar (of me.)" As it is it's just a little vague. I mean, I get what you're saying but I think it would be better the other way. Anyhoo, this is pretty good. In fact, I think I've only read something bad from you once, and those are good odds! Not bad. - oce
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I think you should switch the first and second stanzas. My opinion: Body, Mind, then Soul. Nice write though. I love the imagry you put into this. Like I always say, you never cease to amaze me.
Sara -
like as is. nice write. later Honeybe
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Hmm.
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This is very sensual in a way, but it can also be read in so many different ways and lyrical. This has a really great rhythm. I love the images- silver boat,letters written in cursive, etc.
Great write, I love the whole idea of it.
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