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Smalltown, USA

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I grew up in Smalltown, USA,
The middle of the tri-state rush,
New York always looming
Just across the water.
Many friends, they came and went,
A piece of my heart with each.
I guess, deep down, we knew
What was all around us,
What foul creatures loomed
In the shadows around the corner.
We walked in groups and laughed
Regardless of these evils,
Because growing up in Smalltown, USA,
We didn't have much of a choice.

We were kids then,
And by all rights of the word,
We are still kids now.
We grew up making jokes
About the carjack capital
And the drugs on the street.
We all took our turns
Hiding from those cops,
Hiding from the criminals,
And hiding from each other.
It was all a game then,
Back in Smalltown, USA.

In each face there was something more
Than what our backgrounds held,
Something more than race and religion,
Something more than all of us.
We didn't care who you were,
Or who you wished to be,
Because at the moment,
The kids we were,
We lived only for today.

I guess inside I knew where I was,
I knew what was happening around me.
We grew up tough, but we had dreams,
And we shared our dreams together.
I guess inside I understood
Those dreams wouldn't all come true,
For Smalltown, USA, was just the bitter start.
Many left, as did I, but oh so many stayed.
The ones I grieve for most of all,
Are the ones stuck there forever.

I returned to Smalltown, USA,
And drove those streets of memory.
I drove by your resting place
And did not even know.
Happy to see a street sign
Of common memory to us all,
No one told me as I passed
That you'd taken your final breath.
I passed by without a thought
Of the memory torn away,
The life so short, just twenty four,
That ended there one year ago.

I told you once, as you held your guitar,
You were destined to be Jimi Hendrix reborn.
You smiled that smug, joking grin,
And let another chord scream by.
Now I look upon my guitar,
You finger prints polished in,
Unable to stop thinking of Hendrix
And who you should have been.
In the saddest way you share a bond
With the man I compared you to,
Because just like Jimi Hendrix,
You were taken from us too soon.

In Smalltown, USA, people die everyday.
You read about it, hear about it,
And pass them all away.
With each life stolen on those streets
A gap is left behind.
To many you are just another victim
Of a common Smalltown homicide,
But to your friends you left behind,
And the things you could have done,
You are more, my friend, so much more,
And a loss to this fine world.

My trips to Smalltown will not be in vain,
For when I go you'll ride along
And live those memories with me again.
I'll pass your house, the guitar shop,
The places of our youth.
I'll nod a memory to your college,
And keep your face burned in my mind.
No stories will ever erase
The image I have of you,
The big, bright smile,
The intelligent mind,
And the man who should've ruled.

In loving memory of
Jhmil Johnson
1979-2004
A victim of homicide
You are loved and missed, Mel Mel

Author notes

Please don't be too critical of this piece. It isn't my finest work, but this isn't my finest hour, either.

This piece was written as a memorial and dedication to a good friend I will miss dearly. He was robbed of his life at the age of 24 because someone wanted what was in his pockets. He was returning home from work when he was shot and killed in Jersey City, NJ.

Jhmil was a good friend, a talented artist, a wonderful guitar player, and an intelligent man. He is a great loss to this world.

Jhmil died a year ago, but I was only alerted today to his loss. I am sorry I never got to say goodbye to him, but I'm sure he hears me now.

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This poem took third in a contest! Thanks, SomethingFun!
Written December 1st, 2005

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  • Taur-amandil silver member
    May 10, 2006
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    It's nice to hear from someone who knew him! I met him through a friend while he was still in high school, but we went to college together. One of his friends found me online and let me know of his passing. Jhmil was something else, seriously. I don't think I ever met anyone in my entire life that was as decent a mix of cool and kind as Jhmil was. The world is seriously lacking an amazing person now, and it is everyone's loss.


  • May 10, 2006
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    Excellent

    I read this poem after goggling Jhmil's name..I graduated High school with this man and even went to church with him before that..so I've known him for a longtime...I just found out that he passed away and didn't get to say goodbye either. It hurts me to my heart that I didn't know and more so that this happened...Jhmil could draw his booty off....I saw him in Pathmark working the deli and we were supposed to hang out...He's gone now..One love rest in peace...

    Mone Mone
    PS The poem was beautiful....Five mics


  • Yamataru
    December 6, 2005
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    *hugs* This was so tragic and intense and absolutely wonderful. Very wonderful tribute...it actually made me cry a little, so there...

  • For I Have Sinned
    December 6, 2005
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    this is an amazing poem and congratulations for getting 3rd in my contest! I loved this sooo much, it is very tragic and very beautiful and i just LOVED it.
    Edited on Dec 06, 5:51 p.m. because 'typo'.


  • ShawnG
    December 4, 2005
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    Fantastic

    Sooooooo sad... you will truly win or come close to winning in this contest... Have much solace in the fact that you just made that talented/intelligent person live forever in writing. I am truly sorry for your loss. Thank you so much for sharing.

  • For I Have Sinned
    December 3, 2005
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    omg this is so sad. i LOVE it. unbelieveable.


  • SexyAngel0418
    December 2, 2005
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    WOW... This is very beautiful!!! You did a great job on this!!! I think it is one of your best ever!!! This is a very beautiful tribute!!! Keep up the good work!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • ShaShay
    December 2, 2005
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    A sad experience put into beautiful words. I hurt with you, knowing the bond that friends have, even when far apart. The only thing I can say is get closer to your friends that are still around.
    ~~~POO~~~


  • Lyndon gold member
    December 2, 2005
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    a good elegiac free verse narrative

    This free verse has a subliminal rhythm which would lend itself to music, at least many lines, some of which you could repeat for the lyric. However, as a poem, you have written a ballad style piece of verse on a personal tragedy. Some say it is not polished, but I feel that communicates angst well, especially as the narrative unrolls and you have repetitive phrases to augment this process. In 'Smalltown USA people die every day' is an indirect way of communicating grief of the one death that has affected you and the poetry is therefore clever there (maybe intuitively so). Watch words such as to/too the spell check misses. You spoke of dreams. We must have dreams, and as all writers(including you, now,) know, in comes disillusionment, Kyla. I hope your Mel is a true part of your heart. The poem will preserve that memory, that fact. -from Lyndon Wise.

  • Nanotta
    December 2, 2005
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    This poem made me feel too sad, but it's soooooooooooo beautiful and full of emotions.
    It is also powerful.
    Keep it up.
    Best wishes, Nano


  • rosepoet
    December 2, 2005
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    Emotional write This is very refined and well done, wonderful
    This is a lovely poem and it's very touching.you friend definitely hears you now, through this poem


  • Balthazar
    December 2, 2005
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    This is a lovely poem and it's very touching. I sympathize your loss especially the loss of the person that really was good, intelligent and kind. I believe that your friend is hearing you right know. I felt so much pain and I felt like crying just after I read this poem it's so strong and I see how much you love your friend. Your poem is so beautiful and there is so much love and compassion. God bless you. Love. Thank you for sharring it with us. God bless you.

    Balthazar.


  • manoguru
    December 2, 2005
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    this is such a lovely, terrible poem... i sympathize your loss... especially when the death is so brutal... and to add to the general pathos, you getting the information only after a whole year has gone by.... funny how people don't hesitate to rob others off their lives for the sake of little money... how spiritually bankrupt our modern time is


  • pattyann4500
    December 2, 2005
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    My Dear Sister, I am so sorry to hear of your loss. I'm more saddened that it took so long for someone to let you know about it.

    When beloved friends are taken away, they always take a piece of us with them while leaving a part of themselves for us to remember. It sounds as if your friend left a very large part of himself for you.

    Growing up in such a sheltered life does not always prepare us for the senseless violence that goes on in other areas. Although I had lived many lives before I was considered an adult, I was sheltered from many things that still shock me today. Most of the time I am happy about that shelter for I believe that part of me remained pure--even if it was just a small part.

    Your poem for your friend is beautiful. I don't think it's any less your best because of what it says. You wrote with love and compassion, and your heart poured out into every word. My dearest, Erin, your love is showing. God bless you, Sweetie, and God bless your friend. Love, Paticia

  • riley
    December 2, 2005
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    Ah, but there's a difference between his death and Jimmi Hendrix's. Hendrix died of a drug overdose, more like a suicide than a homicide, but not really that either - most likely an accidental death really.

    But this is a very sad, and powerful poem. You won't see any critical comments from me because I can't think of any except bravo and I'm sorry. Bravo for the excellent tribute to your friend. And I'm sorry that you had a reason to write it at all.


  • NoWayJo
    December 2, 2005
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    you friend definitely hears you now, through this poem, through every thought. you've paid him tremendous tribute in this poem...you've paid yourself tremendous tribute by knowing such a man. very lovely piece of writing Taur, and I hope you come to find peace.

    Jo


  • Sandwich Massacre
    December 2, 2005
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    WOW. you had me in tears. TEARS!

    i have friends who have died, all in car accidents, though. it's hard enough, just the pain of it all. but then to contemplate the fact that this person has just been deleted from existence... it's almost like they really haven't.. because we DO keep them alive in our hearts, memories, those places we've been together, those shared aspirations. but it's that warm physical body, the one we've hugged and leaned on... a voice that used to exist and duet with my voice in laughter and joy... it's hard to just wrap my head around the deletion of that existence. it's because of them that i have a more affirmed belief in an afterlife. God wouldn't make such a spirit just dissappear.

    you might think that you couldn't have done your friend justice in your honor of him. it's easy to think that, trying to justify this soul worthy of so much more... but considering you made me feel for someone i never knew.... that i could imagine myself in a basement with this kid strumming his guitar with hope and aspirations for his future sparkling in his eye... you portrayed that, and i think he's very satisfied by being portrayed in this light to the strangers that come across such a wonderful poem about him.

    there is plenty of justice, you write beautifully!


  • amaranth816
    December 1, 2005
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    Erin... That's horrible! You found out today what happened to him? That's absolutely terrible... Here, have a hug! I think you could use one. s x a million

    I agree with what you said; this is not your most polished poem, but it had a rawness to it that emphasized the pain and emotion behind it. I am so proud of you for getting this out on paper! Good for you. It will help you heal.

    It makes me sick that things like this happen every day. I wish there could be a perfect world without such things as homicide. I never want to lose anyone I love, and yet I'm afraid that it is inevitable. There is too much sadness in this world...

    I wish I could have heard your friend play! If he played as well as you write, then that could have been an amazing combination...

    s

    Kyla

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