Oh no here he comes again little one
Please pretend to sleep and maybe he will be done
Don’t let him see you are awake
Sleep precious child for your sake
But he doesn’t care if she is asleep, he still comes in
And commits his evil evil sin
He creeps into her bed and makes her play with him
There is nothing she can do to win
Once he is done he kisses her lightly and walks out
But he will be back tomorrow night no doubt
She grabs onto me and holds me tight
Knowing that once again she lost the fight
She cries for the rest of the night, and I am soaked in tears
Knowing that her innocence is lost and her heart is filled with fears
I wish I was more than your teddy bear
I wish I could show you how much I really care
I want you to know little one, that I would stop him if I was able to
There is nothing for you I would not do
But for now I am just your little bear, so hold on tight
And I will be your light through this dark lonely night!
Author notes
Option 5) Write about abuse and the effects [esp. child abuse as it is a subject close to the heart
*I pray that children who have been abused find happiness, and help within this world *
Written December 1st, 2005
A contest entry
- [x] Lots of options [x] Something for everyone! Read! by Jade-.
450 points, ended January 28, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I think this is an great poem. great job!
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only nice teddie bear poem i've ever read.
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Yeah! Only deep one...but it's still a teddy bear poem.
I like the child abuse theme, but I'm more a fan of scenery, and concepts and emotions and the like.
Congrats!
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only deep one...??? Im sorry, what????? Im not sure I know what your talking about?
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Oh. It was a response to DJMedina's comment, as well as to your poem.
If you could combine the two, you'd get my comment. But the 'only deep' part is from him saying 'only nice'
and we're both referring to the fact that this is a teddy bear poem.
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this one made me cry
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amazingly beautiful and heart wrenchingly sad. I love how you expressed this, but hate the situation and would kill this man if I knew who or where he was in this world. But, great write and I am sorry you've experienced this.
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Amazing
Just...wow. You got right into the emotions of what being sexually abused feels like. And the concept is brilliance - the teddy bear telling the story. It was a VERY touching piece, and very clever. It brought me back to that place, which is hard, but it shows how much emotion was in it. I also loved how the words flowed.
Thanks for entering my contest, and the best of luck to you.
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You made me cry.
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this was such a sad write to read...its so unfortunat that so many innocent children are anused...my gf has been through this and so have i...keep writting your very talented
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sad yet beautiful
this poem is absolutly beautiful. even if it is about such a sick and twisted thing. it literally brought me to tears while reading it. I love the whole other perspective thing you have here. its like the teddy bear is telling the sad, sad story. Major kudos on this amazing write.
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This poem was amazing and so sad. It's horrible that people go through this. Great way of writing it through the bear's point of view. Congrats on your gold.
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This has to be one of the hardest poems I have ever had to read. It was tourture for me to keep reading this. Truly heartbreaking and very emotional write.
Thanks for entering
Tammy
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You have said all the things that my daughter has felt
Thank You so much for this poem.It touchs the lives of families that have went through this with there kids.
Child Abuse needs to be reported as soon as possible.
And the people that do this to our children need to spend more time in prison than what they are givin.
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Thank you so much for your comment and applause, it was much appriciated. i am sorry your daughter has gone through this. I agree, these people need to spend alot more like in prison, its just not fair, that they take so much away from these children, and justice is never served, but sadly thats the world we live in today. Thanks again for your comment, i hope to look at some of you work soon.
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Darling
Why we hate ourselves
like little evil elves
when we did nothing
to such evil bring?
We are the smiles
of every single child.
We are the trust
spoiled by other's lust.
We are the day
that their clouds allay
but we shall shine
in our later time.
Smoosh
Janet -
very beautiful. i am glad you mentioned this piece to me. i always feel sort of weird using words like beautiful to describe the sadness of pieces like this but that is what it is; tragic subject matter treated beautifully.
and, thank you for your wonderful comments about mine,
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Thank you for your kind comment, it was very much appriciated. I hope to return the favour soon.
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wow... thats all I can say... wow
This is such a powerful write with such emotion
It's such a sad and dreadful topic that too many children these days have to deals with
You caputered it very well that they may feel powerless to stop it and hugs onto their teddy bear for comfort
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despite the fact that i have never experienced this, it appears that others have and i think its a very sad topic, but a very well written poem real life expereices intwinded within such a beautiful poetic style.
peace
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tears dont set you free
this is way too close to home for me
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This was so very sad! But also truly touching.
"But he doesn’t care if she is asleep, he still comes in
And commits his evil evil sin
He creeps into her bed and makes her play with him
There is nothing she can do to win"
Beautifully chilling!
Great write!
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Thank you for your kind comment, it was very much appriciated.
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I am finding it hard to make a comment on this straight after reading it because I am gobsmacked. I love how you have written it from the point of view of the teddy bear, something so many of us have turned to in times of comfort at some stage in our lives. This is a very powerful piece of writing with so much fear, pain and distress captured within every line. Well done and good luck
Claire
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Wow, this is a really amazing piece of poetry. I love the poem being written from the perspective of the teddy bear, very unique and effective. Great job, this is certainly a winner!
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I'm so sad:((
Oh crap now I'm crying again
!! I still have a comfort teddy bear-Billy bear-When my first son died I slept with him like forever. Now I'm going to have to go pull him out of my sons room so I can just hold him tight tonight. RobinRae.
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Awesome, this poem had me in tears. Thank you for sharing and well done.
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Very impactive poetry,well written from the Teddy Bears perspective as well as the Teddy Bear representitive of a young child and the "loss of innocence." This poem made me want to cry. It brought out some very personal memories. I cannot write the way you have because of my own personal expierience. But reading yours has influenced me and it is so heart wrenching to see the tradgedy of sexual abuse, written in such description and emotion. Thankyou for sharing and congrats on winning the gold! You certainly deserve it. -
Such a powerful poem. About such an awful subject. No one should ever have to go through that. I pray that this is not from personal experience. I hope it's fiction. I love the way you put it from the bears point of view. I really liked the poem, just not the dark sins within. Take care of yourself. ttyl Tali
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This was a great poem, just a horrible reality for to many children.
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Sweet
Awwww, that was a little sad, but I liked it. I love teddy bears, still sleep with one.
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WoW That was really great,
It was so sad but sweet how the
teddy wanted to be her guardian angel basically.
This was really touching,
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Excellent!
This is just awesome. You have written a masterpiece on abuse. Your imagery is superb. Vivid and chilling. Sweet and horrible.
I applaud you, poet!
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Wow I hardly find words for this... That's so sad, it brought me to tears... You have written from an interesting point of view, it gives the poem a special uniqueness... For sure you deserve all the trophies you got for this poem. I hope that many read this poem and that your message is heard.
Take care
LittleAnn
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awww, thats all i can think to say...awww
congrats on winning the Gold, your form and scheme were veryyy well thought out
it was well deserved!
~Alea
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depressing very depressing.
it is a very nice poem. i like it all the lines -
Morose,despairing,sad,a stigma on the species of mankind,the tempestuous hormonal overdrive in the midst of innocent cherubism to destroy to abuse to gradually mar the confidence the human element,to penetrate the psyche of a child with the brutal power of a maniacal adult and to propound the same with the protagonistic teddy bear is a feat achieved with great dexterity and is akin to the peeling of a raw onion..the same effect on the eyes...your words are soft,the lines are serene,but the muse aggravates..the enemy within,the devil sticking,satan beckons..then death is a hobson's choice Shubs
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intriguingly interesting
First, thank you for taking interest in the contest and submitting a poem from your collection
Second, your poem talks about a more issue of sexual and physical abuse on children. The worded I found was pretty impressive. The wording makes the reader as if the actions and emotions felt by the main character was being inflicted to the reader itself. Your poem flows nicely and the structural rhyming scheme simple adds to the impact depicted throughout your words! I got to know , is this poem based on real life events in your own life or family?
-Keep the ink flowing and fingers cross!!
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Congratulations
Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning the Gold. A very emotional write. There'd not really anything that I can add that hasn't been already written. Congraulations again.
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Such a hearfelt poem - congratulations for winning gold with this awesome poem. Great write.
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thank you for you kind comment. and i am truely sorry you went through that pain, no one should feel that pain, ever! and to answer the question 'how did you think of such a poem? well i work in child care, and sadly abuse is a huge issue, i just wanted to write something from the view of someone other than the victim, hence why it is writen in the form of a teddy. im am however extremly sorry if this poem opened up closed wounds for you. but thank you again for your kind comment, and good luck with the contest. take care.
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how did you think of such a poem? i was raped when i was 11 by my step dad and this is what i wished i could have read. i used to cry on my teddy bear. aww... thank you for this entry, this just may be the best poem ever. thank you so much for entering this poem into my contest!
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Oh my gosh! That is so cute and sad at the same time. I've never seen a porm written from that perspective. It was very well done, and the message was obviously clear. I love how you made the teddy bear so sweet.
"I wish I was more than your teddy bear
I wish I could show you how much I really care"
That's my absolute favorite part. I almost wish I was the teddy! Very good work,
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We all need a little friend like that. It's good the little girl has hers. If only she didn't have to through all that pain.
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wow..just wow..i love how you portrayed this poem from the point of view of the teddy bear..who would have thought of that? haha i wouldnt have well this is such a great write and congratulations on winning..keep writing..please!
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wow, great poem!
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Wow. Really. You really deserved your gold on this one. I wasn't expecting it, and it really touched me. Great amazing write. It's really sad, but at the same time hopeful... I almost cried just reading it. <3
Congradulations.
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wow. this got me so teary. It's sucha coincidence. I wrote a poem called "she was only nine". It's a true story about a friend of mine who got molested by her father.
This is an extraordinary piece. The teddy bear in the poem makes the content of the poem a million times sadder. Thank you for sharing with me. Best of luck in my contest
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wonderful and beautiful. The teddy bear perspective is very original. Poor poor baby...
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This is a sadly tragic write and tells of something that I am afraid happens all too often. This was vey clever telling the story from the perspective of the toy bear. This is a very powerful and impressive write. A very nice job. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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Wow this poem is extrodinary, it cut me deep and made me cry. Great job.
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aww this is amazing, a very insightful look into the subject, through something as childlike as a teddy bear, well done and keep on writing xxx
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Congratulations on winning the silver, your poem was written well and told a sad story that is so under told by many of it's victims. Portrayed this story in a very unique way using the voice of a loving teddy bear. Thank you for penning your thoughts, well done, well deserved......Ken ..IBT
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Congratulations on your award ths really was an amazing piece The subject matter was a hard one to cover but i think you did it in a sympathetic way.It is so hard to read things like this as it makes one so angry.And hopeless, and helpless Well done with this poem
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Oww this has made me cry .I came to say congratulations on your cup .
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There are so many times that this really happens .. your poem was amazing.
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Thank you
Yeah. You managed to capture the lonely isolation - the bubble of the little girls world - with a clever perspective.
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This is amazing..wow... I...don't knwo what to say...jsut wow.
WWWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!
Cassandra
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