Arriving from the bar last night,
What strange thing did I see?
A message on the phone that said
My girl was through with me.
How could she do this thing to me?
I mean, how could she dare?!
I had to show that silly girl
That I just didn't care!
I had to make her feel the pain
Of giving me the air.
I called her up to tell her just
How much I didn't care.
The phone was busy all night long!
It really wasn't fair.
She should have had call waiting so
She'd know I didn't care.
This morning I jumped out of bed
And hurried over there
To prove to her, once and for all,
How much I didn't care.
I stood there on the sidewalk,
Looked completely unaware,
And, when she'd pass, I'd turn away
To show I didn't care.
But she must have left early which
Is really something rare
And so I lost my chance to show
How little that I cared.
No matter. To her job I went.
The guards gave me a stare
And wouldn't let me in to show
Her that I didn't care!
So all day long I waited. Now
My nerves began to wear.
I had to let her know how much
I really didn't care.
Missed her again! This turned into
A horrible nightmare.
Why should it be so hard to show
This girl I didn't care?
So here I am, at midnight,
Bushes tangled in my hair.
This time I have the perfect plan
To show her I don't care.
I'll toss stones at her window so
That she will be aware
That I don't even miss her and
I truly do not care!
Gee! Look at those round, flashing lights!
And what's that bright red glare?
Methinks it's best to wait a bit
To show her I don't care.
I'll return again tomorrow and
I'll end this sad affair.
She'll really feel bad when she
Sees how I just don't care.
Author notes
Written December 1st, 2005
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Very Clever
This is so clever and so true, I must admit I've been guilty of doing something to 'show someone I don't care' although not to the extremes that the person in your poem has gone to. -
Hehe, back again after a year to read it. Still made me laugh, great job. ^_^
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Very cute.
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Awsome stuff...
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Love Sick??
Yikes u got it bad 4 sum1 if u gotta try prove 2 em dat much dey dnt matter wen really ur determination 2 show em u dnt care proves how much ur hurt... mayb u need 2 realize wats ovr and y instead of wallowing in denial in her bushes!! -
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! it's like i just read some Bob Dylan Lyrics!!!!i mean this was truly amazing!
actually this was really poor. it just kept on going and going and basically i could guess the next line, it was so predictable i almost cried that i wasted the last few minutes of my life reading this. i have no constructive criticism, because in my opinion your whole style is skewed,contrived and rather silly. now before you go looking at my profile. i am not a good poet. but i sure do know when i see one. -
Hehe, I loved it. He most certinally doesn't care, lol. So THAT'S what guys are doing when they keep calling after you dump them (not that I would know). I loved it, great write. ^^
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wow...
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lol
Seems i can remember doing something like this...I did not care either. Sure! lol Great rhyming write
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Funny
Very funny reading! I think this is the first poem I've read so far that has really made me laugh. I enjoy humor! Very cute.
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Excellent
Really enjoyed this super write. Funny isn't it the length and breadths we go to ..Many will relate to this I'm sure....well written...mal
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Funny! I think the last line could have a little more impact if you rephrased it something like "sees how much I didn't care."
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Been there..Done That..
Hi there Deer
Oh! The things we go through to show we don't care.Me...When I hit that little ole bump in the road of life...I was so sweet, and nice, and understanding. How sickening.
I'm still FRIENDS with the boob. Just to show "That I Do Not Care".
Huggers
BonBon
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The effort we go thru to show the persoan we love how much we really don't care. I am gong thru a similar situation so I can realte to this. Just to show him that I don't care!! great write!
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A great write. I know what your going through right now. Love can be hard at times and you have to show them that you really dont care. Very creative and clever. I love how every stanza rhymed with "care." Good job! Bravo!
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Hahaha that was an awesome write, I'm really glad I clicked it. Wonderfully written, my kind of humour ^^ x loved it x
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I somehow think that you might have care to much there dear poet
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Absolutely excellent write !!!! This is just fantastic. So clever and witty!!! Reminds me of so many times I've not cared
lol too. Isn't love grand?!?!? Keep up the great work!! and thanks for sharing this masterpiece!
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I loved it,,,.. it made me laugh....
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this was an exellent write. if was really clever.
i really enjoyed reading it. So keep it up. and i cant wait to read more.
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great
this was a great write, made me smile and think of some of the stupid things i did in the name of love or lust lol
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heh, its great =)
made me smile
still in my teenage-angst-depressed-stereotype-poetry-reading mind i kept expecting her 2 hav killed herself explaining her absence from anywhere
im glad it didn't turn out (definitely) that way =)
great fun poem
SeeJ
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very good
fun to read and made me think it should be set to music. It would great lyrics for a song.
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Oh how I well remember this one Nice writing dear friend
Ruth
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I saw this highlighted Mike and I had to come see. I was not disappointed at all. Your usual rhyming brilliance is on display. The theme of the story never loses its grip on the reader, poor character was lying to himself all the way through. Enjoyed it very much. Von
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Very Nice, I found myself bobbing my head to the words in an anxious kind of way, anticipating the next line/move.
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What every gal wants,
a boy completely unawares.
This was a delightful read. Thank you.
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lol
the song of a scorned stalker
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Wow, did you hit the nail dead on in so many situations. I wish that a lot of the young people could read this..very well done.
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Been there - done that, too, Mark...the "fatal attraction" female type....not much fun, is it? Gets old real fast!
Glad you liked the poem...always good to hear from you, pal 
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Hilarious in a scary kind of way. lol
Wow, this had a little bit of everything - humor, irony and creepiness! lol I found myself both pitying and sympathizing with the pathetic character, all emotion/ego and no sense. This is really very insightful into the mindset of the stalker or any person who does evil without considering himself evil. Nobody ever thinks they're bad. They just have emotional desires that demand satisfaction. Even the people a serial killer chooses as victims are random. It's nothing personal. They're just tools he uses to fulfill his twisted fantasies. That may be the creepiest thing of all - that a psycho can be killing someone but it's nothing personal.
I had one "fatal attraction" situation with a woman when I was about 25, and just like Michael Douglas, her madness was only gradually revealed to me. But when the fecal matter really hit the rotating oscillator, I had this moment of clarity and realized that her problems had nothing at all to do with me in particular. I just walked into her movie. That's when I stopped arguing with her and called the cops to have her thrown out of my apartment. People have sh* to work out, and it often has absolutely nothing to do with the person they're with. Weird, huh?
All this for a humorous poem. Sorry, pal. You must have touched a nerve. haha
I hope all is well with you these days. Great work, as always.
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lots of people think they bad
it is often used as an excuse over consciences
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Does it help if I offer you my shoulder to cry on Deer? I promise to just sit still and listen to your sobbing. I'll even put my arm around you and kiss you on the cheek
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brillliant!!!!
Once again you have blown me away with this you are just so funny its great
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stop spying on her and rusty? But it's so much fun!!! Thank you, Klassy one
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You say it well, Prince. Thank you for your comment and for enjoying
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How many of us have had feelings like this? I am sure many The panic as people leave us the fear you made it so visible in this fantastic write. People that lose their loved ones do the strangest things and not always the right ones. But grieve for what we lost sometimes make our vission lost Great done
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Mike, I have read and read this again... I read it to my daughter this evening. She said to tell you to stop spying on her and Rusty. She says it's the only way you could have been so spot on! She totally lost it when I got to the part about the flashing lights and red glare! I should have commented before now, but I'd get to laughing and just gave up trying to hit the right keys!
(can still do that, tho!)
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Funny how circumstances can get in the way of our good intentions. Might add something about the plans and judgment of mice and men being interchangeable. Makes one wonder if things might have worked out differently if he cared. Likely not...
Made for a fun read. Generally smooth meter and round texture.
Peace,
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Sad thing about a piece like this Mike is the ones who do this, won't have a clue the lesson you are teaching here. LOL Nope..they will be too busy planning their next episode.
Told with your unique poetic flair!
Mary Ann -
Thank you Deb....we missourians know all about stalkers!
Glad you enjoyed
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Twisted
Methinks you have captured the mind of a stalker I love the short stanzas which keep the pace moving and the repetition which proves the point(lessness) of the story teller. Thanks for the laugh at a muddled, conceited mind.
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(does tommy boy impression) I kneeeeew it!
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sweet and silly sums it up well....thanks for enjoying my little foolishness, Wanda....best to you!
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You call my actions immature? I'm crushed!!! No, I'm delighted that you enjoyed my little piece of fun. Thank you!
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Move on we do, Touch I'm sure your laugh is a wonderful thing...glad I could bring one on
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I'm well aware that some don't care...painfully aware! Glad you're not one Thanks for enjoying, good sir.
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Hi, catz! No, she'll never know 'cause I ain't talking! YOU I will always talk to Happy holidays, lady
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thanks for enjoying, cafe! Yep, these kinds are fun to write...and it IS a silly thing humans do...don't we?
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Hi, Tammy...I'll never show YOU I don't care...count on it! Wishing you the best...
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Thanks, Mike...I'm glad you got a kick out of it! Similarity to the bulletin board threads? Well, now that you mention it...
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and I wish you the same, miss Best of holidays to you!
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almost like a decendants song,nice
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Very funny! I love the humorous look at how hard we work to show people that we don't care.
~Amanda
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Excellent wonderfully crafted thank you for t
Me thinks thou hast a winner here... truly delightful and humorous... "Gee! Look at those round, flashing lights!
And what's that bright red glare?
Methinks it's best to wait a bit
To show her I don't care." Excellent... magnificent flow
Thank you for the smiles and me thinks this could be great lyrics Wishing you and yours much success in all of your endeavors and a joyous Holiday Season
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I Love It
This is a really good poem, I love it!!!!!! very well done.
Kisses: Sue
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Poor Poet...she apparently didn't care to find out...a sweet & silly lil' penning...well executed...good flow...Hope it wasn't a real~life situation...especially the part about the red lights flashin'...
Ahhh, you'll find someone that cares as much as you do...you'll see...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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This was fantastic!! You did a great job with the rhyme didn't seem too repetative. Very skilled, very skilled indeed. Props
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quite good
Cool how ya did that..first humor one i ever read and it was pretty good ill tell ya that much. keep up the good work and yea i donno...it was real good though, nice job. -
This is a master work!I adored this!~~~~Suseann
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Well written with style and humor. Loved the story in this - and thanks for the smile! Becky
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This poem made me laugh. I liked it a lot. You're a great writer.
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Dig it
Ah, I love how contradictory this is, and very cutely written. I'm sad to say that I know this feeling, lol, but not quite this extreme. Well done. -
Really very humorous...hahaha..I had a good timereading it....you wanted to show her that you don't care but yet you don't get the chance to do that..lol...and if you really didnt care ,why would you have to go on this show??this means that you do care....hahaha..
anyway I really like this poem..is really good.
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Enjoyed this..funny and enjoyable!
I'll return again tomorrow and
I'll end this sad affair.
She'll feel really bad when she
Sees I just don't care.
<3 Maureen
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Great write,good repitions I loved the humor in this.I especially lovedGee! Look at those round, flashing lights!
And what's that bright red glare?
Methinks it's best to wait a bit
To show her I don't care.
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lol now thats the way to show her this is very cute and amusing while giving the reader something to think about. I like this. nicely done and thanks for the smiles also wonderful flow and rhyme! thanks for sharing
huggles
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Brilliant! You took something completely immature that people actually do (go out of their way to prove that they "don't care"), and turned it into something hilarious! That's talent . I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing and for the laughter!
XOXO Cheerios XOXO
Meg
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Great job!
Nice job. Cute and funny, and it has a nice flow. good job.
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That's showing her Michael!!! This had me laughing out loud. I needed that... Thank you! It's hard to miss someone who has shown that they no longer care to be in your presence, isn't it. Life goes on and we all move ahead! Great job sweetie!
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awesomely awesome
i really love reading this poem the rhymes are perfect and the story is great and i love how it is like he did care but he was in denial and i love it and i think is very very well writen -
LOL...I can relate...
-Eddy
Tach side
s10 L2 was a little weak and didnt flow as nice as the rest
maybe instead of "A horrible nightmare."
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Kinda skerry! LOL. Stalker much? A humorous write with a good moral point. Keep on penning.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
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Stupendous!
Finally! I was beginning to wonder just how long we would have to wait for you to post something again! (Some of us, of course, really didn't care!)
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This was absolutely delightful to read. It was humorous and for
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Good write!!!
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I loved reading this poem, the rhyming and the repetition of 'i didn't care' along with the humour.....a great read!
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Lol.... Hi, Michael, it's nice to see you up to your usual fun reads. So..... now that you've shown all of US how yu don't care about this lady, do ya think she'll ever know how much you DO care ??
A wondefully amusing poem, youalways cheer me up, make me laugh
Love and
Dee
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Oh my I believe I had done something like this in high school, the "I don't care about you anyway". Very cute!
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Ole'!
Little D 1981 wrote and posted: "Totally something someone would do too, go out of their way to prove they don't care, when obviously they do. Hard to word that...lol...anyway, thanks for the great write!" And I concur, adding that the form is good for this, the repetition of four lines, without the stress or lightheartedness of the traditional rhyming schemes. -
Good Poem. lol. Very cute.
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awesome write
LMAO.. this is awesome i love it..lol the flow was supurb... and god i cant stop laughing..thank you for sharing your words with me.,..
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Dearest Michael,
This was very cute. Its hard to show someone you dont care when you go out of your way like that..LOL
I love it, like i love each thing you write
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Much love,
Tammy
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Lovein it. Really cool
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This is a work of evil genius! This was so excellently funny without forcing it. I've heard that it's not easy to write humor (for myself, I can't do it on purpose, but sometimes it happens). In any case, you've nailed that ironic, bringing the reader along on the joke humor. (this is also a bit like painfully long bulletin board threads where people show each other at length how much they don't care about each other's arguments...)
Your whole progression through this was brilliant, too, well excecuted to allow the narrator's mania to slowly grow, and show itself without being too broadly illustrated.
I loved it.
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Excellent !
wow! Very good poem. Very funny I really enjoyed reading this. You did a very good job writing it. Keep up the awesome writes!
Peace
Desyre -
I loved how it kept repeating the same few rhymng words. sounded really good. liked it a lot!
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LOL, this is really cute! Totally something someone would do too, go out of their way to prove they don't care, when obviously they do. Hard to word that...lol...anyway, thanks for the great write!
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lol! trying to show her you just don't care by going out of your way because you do care... cute poem
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