trapped in a small world
c l a u s t r o p h o b i a
sets in
seeing no way out
people just d o n t understand
they look in
they try to h e l p
which [I suppose in some ways] they do
but I need more
I don't know what
how can I?
I'm t r a p p e d
the glass has become frosted
I used to be able to see a way out
its a continuous circle of
p a i n and s u f f e r i n g
and I'm in the middle
nowhere to go
Author notes
I know this is really bad, my state of mind recently hasn't been good enough to write anything even half decent
Chloe
Written December 1st, 2005
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wow
wow you are so intense, your so deep into your poetry, i think your great -
very very good
Ooooo.. i like this poem.. its emotional.. great work
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This is great, I really enjoy reading your work!
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Wow and wow again this absaloute awesomeness, did you mean bad as in good bad bad good thingy, spose not well anyway this is no way bad, whihc is what i should of said in the first place. Great write whooooooo for you.
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this isn't bad no way!!! this is pretty good actually, im liking it so
keep em up 
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Killer write. I enjoy it. Its not bad or half decent, It's really good so [like the others said] don't put yourself down.
keep it up.
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Hmm, i disagree, this poem is more than half decent, it's very decent. I think this is a great poem, I really felt your emotions, the way you seperated the words out creates a nice effect, and your feeling of being trapped comes through very well, and very strongly. You have a great poem here, full of deep emotion. I like this a lot, great job!
~Flowerpot
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Yeah I agree with the first comment. You should not put yourself down on this one, because to me, it's almost chaotic, the way the human mind is. But, it makes perfect sense... if that makes any sense... Anyhow.
A good poem, indeed not one of your best, but worth an applause, and a "Don't put yourself down!!!" -
This is really a good poem. I can "feel" your emotions. This is really very well written. Good job!
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is not bad! no way! love the structure and layout/presentation whatever...v good effect. awesome, gives a good insight as to what you're feeling atm. nice work dude L x
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I love this, you have a powerful emotion that just overcame me while I was reading this. Great write, you've got talent.
Keep em comming.
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WOW hunni this is soo sad! this holds great depth and im sure you will feel better soon, were all here for you! i hope you do anyway this was a very well thought out and structured poem keep up the amazing work! luv u
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Thank you very much for the comment huni xxx
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that isnt bad at all so delete your comment! i like it, it describes depression really well, it does seem like there is nowhere to turn and although people do mean well they do also annoy because unless they have suffered it as well you know they are thinking "snap out of it". there is no quick fix but it can be beaten or at the very least accomodated. i love the gps between the letters that make it seem like you are spelling it out and add pauses that work well. well written hun.
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