Kiss me with your sweetened, scarlet lips
I will be your naughty, little whore
Beat me, fuck me; grab me by the hips
Caress my body with your fingertips
Torture me 'til I can't take anymore
Kiss me with your sweetened, scarlet lips
Paint my back red with one of your whips
Relish my pain, throw me to the floor
Beat me, fuck me; grab me by the hips
Shower me with a series of nips
Trace my entire inner core
Kiss me with your sweetened, scarlet lips
The wine between my thighs awaits dips
from the one who's made me scream before
Beat me, fuck me; grab me by the hips
Make me scream until each cry rips
through each room and every closed door
Kiss me with your sweetened, scarlet lips
Beat me, fuck me; grab me by the hips
Author notes
I actually like this one! *GASP*
Villanelle - AbA2 abA abA2 abA abA2 abAA2 rhyme.
Written December 1st, 2005
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A contest entry
- Give me your Best! ( adult - alternative) by Dragonsong.
300 points, ended February 5, 2006, 3 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Glad it was to your liking. Thank you for your comment. 
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wow. and that is exactly what it is to be what i am. a slave. congrats !! bravo and i loved every bit of it!!! i will surely show this to my Master and my Mistres!!!!
thank you for the wonderful read!!
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niiiiiiiiiice....sexy too
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Sure, go ahead. 
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amazing
Wonderful Job. I liked this one a lot, mind if I share it with Master? Hehehe. -
Thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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You have penned a very good write, very erotic. I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing this with us.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
Thank you so much for your kind words.
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This is a very well written piece; I have a lot of respect for someone who can master structure in this way! Very special, nicely erotic, with a good amount of kink… Well Done ~Dragonsong~
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That's what it's supposed to do.
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very nice, i like the imagery, made my mind go a wondering . . .
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Lmfao. Thank you for such a lovely comment. Made me smile.
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Oh my god I got chills... This poem is on fire it's so damn hot! If this poem doens't win a trophy I'll IM the host of the contest myself and ask them why!
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Thank you, darling.
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Bravo my dear!
A most hot and steamy piece that surely gets the blood pumping hard and heavy. You overload the senses and send the body into a total melt down.
Excellent!
Blessings
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Well, villanelles are a certain length, darling. To make it any longer, would have been to abandon the form. Maybe it ws only meant to be a tease.
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just wow, you definitely got a rise out of me on this one...only thing is, i felt it to be to short, just felt like a sudden stop to the pleasure...lol, like a tease. but it flowed well and definitely felt the passion, good job.
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Why thank you.
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ooooo, norty and yummmy, i love the .... wine between my thighs.... and i like the ryhming of it too...good luck in the contest, dont think you'll need it though!!
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I meant it as a straight couple, but I didn't make reference to the genders, so I guess it can be taken as either way. Thank you for your comment and good luck with judging.
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This is very well written. I like the repeating phrases. I have a question. Is it a straight or gay poem. I can see it as both and I was just curious to which it was. Very good and good luck in the contest.
Love,
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Thank you for your comment.
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that was a beast poem. so much passion.
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*smirks* Oh, my poor dear Precious.
Don't push yourself too hard, my darling. You've got to do enough of that just to please me. 
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NAUGHTY! But so wonderfully good.
By reading these pieces, I may finally be inspired to write the piece you so badly want from me. Damn my mind for keeping me from writing lately.. 
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Eww! No! Stop twisting my words woman! If it HAD to be written I'd prefer it to be written by someone else.
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OH, you more into WATCHING, huh?
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Ha ha...nah. I couldn't bear too and I wouldn't know what to do. I'd prefer it if someone else did it...like YOU for instance.
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Detail? Geez! Dirty woman! You SHOULD be writing erotica for how dirty minded you are! Hm...I bet it'd be hot if you DID do Ai.
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Do Ai? what do you mean do Ai?
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Not ALL of it, but you have to do Ai.
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O-o-only LIGHT erotica and I don't do all the detail. YOU do. heh heh.
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Yet you write erotica with me? Hahaha....I WILL get you into it. Thank you for your comment.
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Honestly I'm not into this type of...topic but the villanelle itself is fantastic! I really really like this one for it and I'm glad you like it too. You should be proud of this one.
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Oooh...Now THAT'S an accomplishment. Thank you for your comment.
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Thank you, my dear. I'm glad you love to read so much of my writing.
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absolutely amazing...very vivid and really makes me want to see my fiancee
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this was yet another fun read. I've been a little slow with the postings this month so it's nice to be able to read yours
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Next time?
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Yeah, you do have a point about that... O.o;'
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Well if you DIDN'T like this Villanelle I would have to beat some sense into you, woman!
Erm. In a non-erotic way.
Anyway. I like this muchly...and...and...woo!
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Thank you, my dearest darling lover. ♥ Your love for it makes me love it MORE!
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Darling, I always write down if it's about any characters in the author's notes....so no, this was actually quite random. Glad you liked it. <3
Edited on Dec 01, 1:09 p.m. because ''. -
Ohhhhh.. ~Giggled into her hands, blushing all.. Dark.. Like?~ OH EM GHEE, yes. This is hot. Plain and simple. It makes me.. Want to go to Norfolk and, like, hide in Tony's carrrr.. Until he has a break.. AND THEN SHOWER HIM WITH EROTIC THOUGHTS.. Then run away before we can act them out. &heart; WHY!? .. I dunno; but it sounds like a hell of a good plan to me. ;]
I must agree with everyone else: this poem is STUNNING. Of course, I've liked your other Villanellessss.. But oh well; this one by FAR is my favourite.
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I like this one quite a bit Rose. ^^' You're convincing me to try vianelles! Anywho, I have a question- Is this about Kira, Sharazon, or anyone? O.o;'
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Goodness, isn't the english language such a confusing thing at times? Thank you for pointing out the typo. I value everyone's opinion on my writing, unless they're plainly out to just put me down. Then I ignore them.
I'll see about your latest drabble. If you really want to broaden your horizons, I have a variety of wild writes. Especially to do with BDSM and Master/Pet relationships.
Thank you for your comment.
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This is a little wild. Very nicely done. I see nothing wrong with the form. Of course I am not very familiar with it, so others may have a differing opinion.
One error I did find was in the fifth stanza, first line: whine should be wine. Otherwise, a nice read, if a departure from what I usually read. I fear I must broaden my horizons. You must read latest drabble. I did put it under adult. I am not sure even I can read it. LOL
Thank you for sharing. And the heads up.
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