One day, when I broke the ice cream machine at the Old Country Buffet, I was out back trying to figure out the wiring problem and wiping up huge pools of vanilla supreme. While I was crouching in the sticky mess, someone behind me asked me if I was done or not. I turned around and saw the ugliest shoes ever! I then looked up and saw you. I was trying not to laugh at the hideous things and I asked you, “What do you mean?”
You said, “Are you finished, you know, getting off?” looking around the sticky white mess still dripping out of the machine and grinning.
I laughed at your humor and replied, “Nope, almost.” I had to get back to work so I turned and began to rewire the machine again.
You bent down and said, “Lemme see…yeah, right here’s your problem.” You tightened the screw and connected two wires. “It should work now.”
I looked at you incredibly and plugged the machine in. It started right up. “WOW!” I screamed. I realized I’d met the perfect love of my life; someone who was a mechanic and a comic stud. I scraped some vanilla goop off the ground and smeared it all over those ugly shoes. You looked at me in agreement and we frenched without hesitation.
“Now you’re gonna have to get some new shoes!” I said.
“Let’s go right now!” you answered.
We ran off into the sunset holding hands and skipping.
I was fired the next day for leaving the machine outside still plugged in. Apparently the circuit it was plugged into couldn’t stand the voltage for very long so the circuit was fried and it started a small electrical fire in the parking lot and until there was lots of smoke and flames, no one noticed. Finally the junior manager stepped outside for a smoke and he got it in the face. They heard his screams from the inside and recovered his body a few hours after the firemen had put the fire out. That ice cream machine still worked after they recovered it from the fire and it has never broken down again, thanks to your superior mechanical abilities. Oh, and it fries every circuit they plug it into.
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This is an idea I got off of Sean's author page...yeah, I've been planning to do this for a while, Erin.
70. Write a glorified story about how you met and fell in love with them, start out with "One day, when I broke the ice cream machine at the Old Country Buffet..." and give it to them.
I was recently told that this story didnt really sound like two lesbians; it sounded more like two gay men. what do you think? I actually agree about the gay men...I never thought of it that way.
Written December 1st, 2005
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ahhh this isnt as interesting after reading the one insanekitty1313 did. yeah, it does sound like to guys, it also looks like it was rather rushed. not only that but it seems very unrealistic.
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warm and humorous
saw u in cb, and felt like giving you a "pick me up" and decided to comment on one of your poems.... funny, you may think this is an actual short story.. but really it flows like a poem, save the last "stanza". i really enjoyed how you talked about everyday life with such a innocent happy point of view... i wish that i could capture those moments in my writing... all i talk about is my issues... but it's wat is true in my life right now so, watever is true from your heart cant be wrong.... i just wish i had experiences like you do here.. to write about... this was heart warming.. and the way that you where so blessed to meet someone like that... that is amazing.. i think i have a crush on your life... i wish it was mine.. lol.
hope you dont think i'm weird after this super long comment... i just wanted to let you know that there are people who listen... and i just so happen to be one of those... so iuf you ever have the need to talk about anything, you can feel free to talk to me... the only reason why i offer this is because you requested a ear in the cb... and i decided to do more then just offer u a ear... but to offer my opinion on your writing too...
well hope that you keep writing and i will most definitly read more of your work... and hopefully we could im eachother sometime... i'm online for another 15 mins. so let me know that you got this...
your fan,
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It's funny. That's what it was meant to be, so you've accomplished what you set out to do.
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its actually a short story, not a poem, thats why its "so long". i try to put stuff on storywrite but it wont work. (i actually thought it was a rather small short story...)
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its funny and good. and really really long. but its cool. keep it up and check out my stuff
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