The cool mist settles down
Weaving its way through branches
Filled with fresh new leaves.
The sun sending golden rays
Cutting through the trees
Smiling on the bluebell floor.
The soft silence like a blanket
Comforts this fresh new day
Occasionally broken
By the pristine waters
Gently wandering along their path
A picture of heaven
The only thing missing
Is an angel.
I sit here on this summer's morning
And listen as my world is dawning
All alone in my forest dream
Nothing is heard nobody is seen.
The calm of the day washes over me
Still no-one around and no-one to see
I lay on my back and smile to the sky
My mouth is so wet my lips are so dry.
Fingers drift over my smooth silky skin
Still trying to search for the angel within
I look to my breasts with nipples erect
How can my own hands have such an effect?
In my mind is a picture, a picture of you
It's because of this thought, I do the things that I do
My legs splay apart, soles touching each other
Knees kissing the bluebells, they'll never recover.
My hand gently moves to my swollen moist rose
That’s enveloped with petals that try to impose
As my trembling fingers massage my clit
Rubbing much harder, I need to submit
To the passions that race through my body and soul
This is the moment, I’m nearing my goal
My body is moving a fast pacy rhythm
Can’t wait any longer, there is no decision.
Soft silence disturbed, screams of luscious delight
My cum is now running, my breathing so tight
Tears stream down my face, in a life of their own
And the plateau I reach with a whispered soft moan
Leaves my body so lifeless, my mind filled with awe
I lay for a lifetime, an angel once more.
Author notes
Written December 1st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- LOVE thyself by Dr Satan.
816 points, ended March 11, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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If staying with flowers theme...don't use the word clit
some words are not sensual...even if correct...
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Don't use the word clit? Guess i could have said clematis...sounds pretty similar... though it wouldnt quite rhyme with submit. Thank you for the comment
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A VERY BEAUTIFUL PIECE, INDEED - FROM A VERY BEAUTIFUL WOMAN!
I look to my breasts with nipples erect
How can my own hands have such an effect?
In my mind is a picture, a picture of you
It's because of this thought, I do the things that I do
You did quite a fine job of loving ourself, Angel - and I was happy to take matters into me own hands, too - hiding in the trees - very clearing - wishing to partake of your morning dew - but much too shy to disturb you!
Soft silence disturbed, screams of luscious delight
My cum is now running, my breathing so tight
Tears stream down my face, in a life of their own
And the plateau I reach with a whispered soft moan
Leaves my body so lifeless, my mind filled with awe
I lay for a lifetime, an angel once more.
A sweet and sensual piece filled with fine lines, rhythm, and rhyme that had me stroking right in time with it - with a heavenly ending as the lines above indicate.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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I just had to take a glance at your portfolio given the name (my youngest is a huge Dr Who fan, and has just starting to watch the Sarah Jane Adventures). Now this is a lovely poem Sarah - written a while ago I know - but is, as your say, more sensual than erotic, and yet quite exciting. Naturalistic too. I liked the shape of this on the page also. It may have been unintentional, but this looks a little like the figure of a woman. Well done. I will certainly go read some more of yours. Dean
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this is incredibly amazing.
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I love the set up the imagry is amazing then how you flow into the more sensual part of it like tellign a story only more poetically, thre are a few flow and rhymnign errors but besides that an interesting peice, not what I generally think of when I hear the word erotica lol but then I'm one of the judges cause I look more at the poetry then wory about the effect if that makes any sense, anyway the poem it's self is relaly well done you may want to fist the rhying here and there as well as the flow in some areas but besides that well done, thank you for entering and I wish you the best of luck!
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uh huh
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Oh, to be the flowers.
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more than sensual
I read this at the same pace your fingers worked towards it's dream and I felt just as breathless at the end. Magical, just great sarahjane, who oddly is the name of my exwife. Hope your not the same and if you are, how come you never told me about your talent.
Loved it
TC of old England yore.
I wonder what this white sticky substance is on my key board, perhaps it fell from the sky?.
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I don't often find the erotica on the site particularly erotic. A few obscenities and a physical description of sex pall for people over seventeen. This piece, on the other hand has a much more psychological and sensual feel that draws one into the mood and really shares the sensuality of the experience. Orgasms are wonderful things. Thanks.
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This is very beautiful! I love writes about self pleasure. And this was tastefully done! Put a very nice smile on my face just reading this.
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Excellent
Ooooh, this really makes the heart thump and the body tingle. Very well done! -
Ah Summer mornings you just can't beat them,now i know why there's no women about my street first thing.lol.Excellent write my friend.Kenny
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good.
This was good. I'm a lesbian too. Thanks for the ride. -
Glad you enjoyed...thank you for reading and commenting. sj
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Thank you for reading and commenting, am very pleased you got the wow factor from this. Ty sj
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I totaly agree with the other here, tastefully done and very sensual. Really got me going! LOL
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HOT DAMN! This is wow, amazing! Pleasure yourself is always hot. And I like how you said that you imagining 'you' as if he were there with you just watching you. AMAZING.
Good Luck in contest!
Missy
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Thank you Colin for commenting, and the applause too, much appreciated. I'm pleased you enjoyed. Ty sj
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Wonderful write
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hehehhe, yep, you can do this kinda thing down the bottom of my garden [if you have the time, which i never do
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Ty for the clappy, and of course, I've altered my apostrofis ty
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ohh that is a nice way then to start the morning, sounds better than jam on toast anyway
Weaving it's way - its way...
summers morning - summer's morning
spill ink and twist me into the shape of love...
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Thank you, for reading and commenting, erotica is not my thing really, I prefer a more gentle and sensual approach. I'm pleased you enjoyed. Thank you. sj
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Amazing write. Such gentle flow. Such gentle yet vibrant & passionate descripitions. Superb write. Bravo.
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Grins, nothing like day dreaming in a bluebell patch....ty for reading and commenting, much appreciated. sj
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Mmmm, nice! What imagery, what a dream. Sensual and erotic, but still tastefully done. Enjoyed immensely. Now I need t go lay down on that green grass, stare into the clouds, and slowly drift off to sleep. LOL
Thanks for your entry and good luck
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Very erotic and very sensual; we very much enjoyed the reading of this! Thank you for sharing and for entering in such an awesome piece! Bravo!
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Very good!
Damn!
I initialy wondered while reading this that you entered the wrong contest. Then near the midpoint and through the rest. It got me going! Thanks for entering! I do hope my girlfriend comes over today! lol -
Now this is a dream I wouldn't mind having. Could you please mail it to Darkerknight care of this site? A very sensual write that left me wondering why it ended. Please don't wake me up. Thanks for making me squirm.
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Fantastic imagery. The tenses are a little scrambled and the poem could use some touching up, but overall it was incredibly well done. This is exactly the kind of writing I wanted -- sexy, yet classy.
Great work!
Best of luck to you.
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excellent
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beautiful write, I must say in reading erotica i've never seen a "self pleasure" poem as good as this one, your flow was great.. aweosme job on this peice
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Wow! Quite welcome! Thank you for your comments, i enjoyed writing this one too. Ummmm....forgive me for asking...but what does your verdict actually mean please??
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wtchrpr...4.5
sarajane1705;
The calm, serene setting is the perfect lead in to this bold and lusty poem. You have related the arousal of feelings stimulated by thoughts of the partner vividly. The continuity of the poem excellent. In flowing images it builds to the stage of ecstacy, then to the bliss of contentment. Your open, honest style in writing this piece leaves no indecision on the part of the reader. This allows full attention to the beauty of the account. Stimulating, evocative and satisfying, a very good read. Thanky you. -
Thank you for the comment and applause, lafffs..if you get too hot...i'll mail you a fan!!!! er....self promotion time...did you read my 'shameless hussy'..similar vein, but more raw...!!! I really do appreciate your kind comments, thank you.
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Extremely sensual
Now is it me or did it get hot in here? Seriously this is extremely sensual, Bravo poetess.
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Thank you for your comment and applause, much appreciated!
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Very nice.
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ooo thank you for the applause...the angel, is representational of the spiritual plane she reaches at orgasm!
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this is great, i love how it builds, and this is wonderful, I lay down on my back and smile to the sky
My mouth is so wet my lips are so dry, i am having problems with the angel part grins (just teasing) its a wonderful example of all of a woman, nicely done, as usual
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