A pistol, black, glistening,
joined by evil leer,
leans, impatiently, by her head.
His face, red, mutilated
glaring eyes striking
with angry, poisonous venom.
Her clothes, ragged, shredded
scattered by his hands,
earthquakes explode under her skin.
His body, naked, oiled
grinning unrelentingly
special weapon, hard, ready.
Her body, exposed, rigid
waits, quaking
dreading the torture.
His weight, massive, unyielding
crashing, crushing
cutting, stifling her breath.
Her throat, seared, jagged
cages shrieks
fighting, fleeting, no escape.
His weapon, human knife
stabbing deep
tearing, rending at every thrust.
Her tears, burning, eroding
unleash the venom,
scarring, destroying her, forever.
Author notes
I went with option #1. This is a poem about an event that changed my life forever... It is 100% true. I don't know if you would consider this cruelty... but rape is one of the cruelest crimes we can be a victim of... which is why I chose it for this contest.
I would say this falls under physical/sexual cruelty...
Written November 16th, 1992
A contest entry
- Rape, Abuse, Assault by silencethequestion.
300 points, ended May 5, 2007, 29 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I hate memories and I know how it feels to have them haunt and violently interupt your day and you night...I'm sorry and this was so well written so truthful and raw...keep writting your very talented
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i love this. It is deffinitly what i was looking for. No one should ever go through that, and and im sorry that this is 100% true. It is a cruel, evil thing to do and words can not describe how bad it is. I'm glad you entered
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well, as the victim of this event... I would have to say, yes... it was very cruel. At least, it felt cruel to me at the time.
but I understand that this isn't exactly what you were looking for. You probably wanted me to be cruel... and that just isn't how I am... so I entered something that showed the cruelty of others. -
It's not really a cruel poem, but it's certainly nasty especially if it's true and the act was cruel. You could have made it extra cruel by stating you prayed nightly that the rapist's children would die of cancer. That would have got me going. As it is,
Flatulence star rating (max=5): ***½ . -
for all the comments, I thank everyone. This happened such a long time ago... and I have come through and I have survived it, and I am a much stronger person now. My original purpose in writing this poem was for a catharsis, and so that someone else could learn from my past.
If I have made someone think about what a victim actually endures during a rape situation... then this poem has succeeded in what it was meant for... -
this poem is so powerful your words provide such a shocking image in my head. i am sorry that you had to endure such a horrid thing. take care, nice write, LJMYERS X
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ladiestorm~
Hey! I thought that this was a really good write, I think no one should have to do through this type of pain...yet no matter what it still happens...You just have to stay strong. Keep on writing, I hope to stumble across some more of your work again.
~!~Manda~!~ -
what a gripping story for the reader and what a horrible experience this must have been for you. I won't pretend that I can even imagine what it felt like and still does up to this date
. I do hope that youhave somehow been able to move on . Being able to write about it would sem as if it is a step in the right direction to help purge all of this ugliness out of your mind.....and maybe one of these days you will come to think of yourself as a true survivor. All I can say is that I am so sorry and being that this is such a personal piece I would not dare critique it in anyway , so I just wish you the best in this contest ( but more important ---in life)
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reenie
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Yes indeed, rape is the cruelest crimes of all. I see all the results of it in this write, and one need not continue to tell how it destroys a victim of rape. Anger, frustration etc, etc. A very well written piece, stirring and creating the same in a reader.
Love and light,
Lencio
PS: Life has to go on, you must put this at the back of your mind and go on, live life to the fullest. Blessed be, -
I love it, but it hurts me because this happened to me on a much larger scale. amazing piece love
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a good piece, i am just wondering why sad/dark poetry far outweighs the happier poetry. spill poetic ink and twist me into the wild crazy shape of unfathomable love...
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thank you. I am glad it fit what you were looking for
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WOW there is nothing else i can say perfection!
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