Tell me something, darling:
tell me why we couldn't leave
things as we had planned to keep them,
things as they should be.
Tell me why you toy with "us,"
pour salt in unhealed scars,
then cover me in kisses
as we share love under stars.
Tell me why I've stuck around,
put up with all these games;
tell me why I can't forget
your love despite these aches.
Chorus:
Shattered pieces of broken hearts
that pour from eyes as tears
Drown us both in needless pain
Only to be seared
By love's affection and caresses
As you take me in your arms
And kiss the pieces back together.
How long can this go on?
Tell me something, darling:
tell me why you've called it quits
but always keep me close at hand
like you could still commit.
Tell me why you're so uncertain,
you can't seem to decide
if you'd be better off without me
or with me by your side.
Tell me why I can't move on,
still cling to a fool's hope;
tell me why I truly feel
this isn't our last rope.
Chorus:
Shattered pieces of broken hearts
that pour from eyes as tears
Drown us both in needless pain
Only to be seared
By love's affection and caresses
As you take me in your arms
And kiss the pieces back together.
How long can this go on?
Bridge:
Whisper all the things I need
to hear to feel alright;
cover me in kisses like
you used to when I would cry.
Chorus:
Shattered pieces of broken hearts
that pour from eyes as tears
Drown us both in needless pain
Only to be seared
By love's affection and caresses
As you take me in your arms
And kiss the pieces back together.
How long can this go on?
Author notes
hm... maybe more angsty than your usual... at least your "usual" that i've read heh. but i've never been able to force poetry and this is what's on my mind. 
sorry. but hey! i tried! 
good luck with your contest
Written November 30th, 2005
A contest entry
- For Lyricists by Andy Stephenson.
300 points, ended December 1, 2005, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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interesting? lol hm... how so? yeah well this is based on something that's been going on now for .... oh... 2 months almost? it's hard. it's hard to have loved someone and for them to suddenly change their mind but not let you go... and then feel like they're holding back any love they had for you. i dont want to say "i dont know what to do" because i've already decided to wait it out, but im at a point where i'm literally begging god to make it stop... one way or the other. i'm tired of torturing myself... even if it is for one of the best men i've known. thanks
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Hmmmm. This is a side of you I'm seeing for the first time and I find it quite interesting. Nobody likes to be stomped on, do
they? I'm not too sure. I know I don't. But I have. I like your
song. I like the way you worded it, of course. Good job. Shancy. -
thank you very much not mistaken... most definitely broken love that i'm still hoping will be fixed thanks for reading and commenting
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yeah it happens. thanks.
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doesnt it suck? thanks
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thanks
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This lyrical write does a "double-face" What I mean that that, is the fact that it both painted an image and also it told of a story of broken love(if I'm mistaken) however the real clincher is the blow away lines. Keep it up
Rae -
Tell me something, darling:
tell me why we couldn't leave
things as we had planned to keep them,
things as they should be.
Tell me why you toy with "us,"
pour salt in unhealed scars,
then cover me in kisses
as we share love under stars.
I DEFINITLY KNOW HOW YOU FEEL THERE. -
I know where your comming from,good word choice,good flow,good rhythm,all around good write---kirby
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Im ushually into poem but this has its part in it. I like it you can really do something with it nice job!!
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heh well the thing is that it's nto a bad relationship. it's a really good one, actually. there's just doubt and instead of me saying "ok fine i can handle a break and i'll go off on my merry way" i'm sticking around. but anyway. a bridge appears in some songs... kinda like a change in beat suddenly... a climax, sorta.
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Lyrics arn't my best bit but I quite like these. Lots of people seem to have these problems. They know they would be better of without them, but they can't get around the fact that either the girl or the guy loves the partner. It's like those people who say 'I know he loves me really'.
Any way the words are good but what does the bridge do in a song. I get the chorus and the verses - but the bridge? Is it sort of a ending like a conclusion?
Edited on Dec 01, 10:32 because ''. -
thanks. i dont have many poems i actually put as lyrics... actually, i only think i've done it once before
so glad you liked it good luck judging! ooo yay! cuase i definitely dont know much about the melody for it.. i just know the beats are there so you CAN make a melody
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I think it is really pretty good. At this time you share the lead. Some of your lyrics I liked quite a lot. I also kinda felt a melody as I read it.
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