Shed a tear
crawling through the tunnels
can't escape whats been done
already flooding, almost drowning
your the way out
To the playground
in our own backyard
watching the swing
memories sing
tickling my ear
from the tune of your breathe
just swinging
Wishes were failed for just one more day
to feel the warmth of just one hug
to feel the whisper of just one word
to be the daughter of just one father
to hold the finger with one little hand
but I'm reaching the end
of all the wrong turns
your perfect smile running away
Crawling back with no floods
where the beginning began
where the ending ended
smothering my wishes
of just one moment in between
where memories fail to except
Death breathed the last words
of proclamation over his life
It was his time
The perfect excuse, the perfect abuse
of words to explain.
Author notes
Sorry that it had to be depressing, but its about my father who had passed away when i was quite young. And probably somebody that i will keep close to my heart always.
A contest entry
- 100% Emotion by PsychoticPoet.
300 points, ended January 2, 2006, 31 entries
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WOW!!! I thought that this was a very powerful write amd it really came from the heart. You are a very talented writer. Good luck in my contest and keep up the good work.
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What a touching poem, Good Job. Good Luck in the Contest!
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To think it's true that a lot of people can relate to this piece is very sad. But, you've captured the emotional side of it in just the right way. The imagery, as formentioned by another, is wonderful because it makes the reader feel as if they're the ones feeling these things in your poem. I like that about it. Great write.
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Deep
I love the imagery in this poem. It makes very sad. This is the kind of poem that everyone can connect to. It's beautiful and thoughtful.
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This is amazing, poet. You write well so keep them coming. Thanks for sharing it with us and good luck with your contest.
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wow thats really good i really like the way you express how you felt at each moment and detail it'w one of those poems that you just don't wanna stop reading.
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Wow, I can really feel the emotion in this and you have expressed it so well, The wanting and longing for the litte things in life that children should have, denied your youth. Great description and intense thought into this piece. Very wmotional and from the heart that hurts so bad.
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