Shattered
slivers pierce
my aching Soul ~
how could I
have failed you,
of all people?
I couldn't hear
your silent whispers ~
you, who knew
my Heart
so well...
Your quiet strength
defied my understanding ~
I could not hear
the echo
of the fragile pieces
tinkling,
a windchime in distress,
battered by the tempest...
It doesn't matter
what I say ~
what I do ~
I cannot make up
for abandoning
my Friend
when she needed me
the most ~
I can only say
how sorry I am
that you were left alone
in the shadows
of my leaving
what I thought
was already gone...
~ November 29, 2005
11:45 p.m.
Author notes
Picture & background courtesy of Presence
This is for a very dear Friend of mine who was havin' a rough time...
I thought she'd given up on our friendship; I was wrong...
She just didn't know how to tell me how much she needed me...
& I couldn't hear her...I hear her now...
A heartfelt thank you to everyone that commented...I'm overwhelmed by your responses to this poem...
6-- Lost Friendship____Why it happened and how it makes you feel.
Written November 30th, 2005
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Thank you for hosting & for your kind comments, Heavenly Angel...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Very very touching, sweetie...
Thank you for sharing this!
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Thank you for your gracious words, Belle. I'm pleased you enjoyed my work. I appreciate your kindness & your time. Be well, Poet. Wanda
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Thank you for your gracious words, pozo. I'm pleased you enjoyed my work, my Friend. I appreciate your kindness & your time. You offended someone with the word sibilance??? Did they think ya were callin' 'em "Sybil", as in having multiple personalities???
Be well, Poet. Wanda
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Dear Wanda, this is such a beautiful take on the beauty of real listening.. what a gift it is to be a true listener (something we sometimes take for granted or fail to appreciate) ... hearing with the heart. Gosh, I must remind myself now to hear the whispers and the tinkling of fragile pieces in other's souls. This is most beautiful. Congrats on your gold trophy--well deserved! Belle
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Great poem of appology. It described your bond of friendship and how it got a bit spoiled quite well Nice use of repetition and sibilance here (I hope I'm not the person I offended by using that word before, I just mean repeating the 's') Keep writing, this was a powerful poem with good imagery Well done for winning gold
All the best
Pozo
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Thank you for reading & for your kind comments, Josh-13...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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I loved it, well deserving of Gold. this was an awesome poem, I really enjoyed it. You had a nice flo and smooth way of expressing this.
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Thank you for hosting & for your kind comments, XxCrimsonGoddessxX...I'm pleased you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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wow
Oh, now here is the imagery I was asking for. The first stanza is my favorite. This is a real work of art, and you are a TRUE poet. Outstanding! ~Lilly~ -
Thank you for your thoughtfulness & for considering this one, Trina... Wanda
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Hon although I kept the other I will remove this one. I just think a few others are more in the grasp of my understanding. Thanks Wanda, Trina
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Thank you, Trina. I'm pleased you liked it.
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This is another great entry...Thanks Wanda and best of luck...Trina
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Thanks, Shadow... Wanda
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Great poem. Good luck in the contest. -
I know this, but I'd forgotten, apparently...& when the other person chooses silence, it becomes even more difficult to carry...she told me much the same thing, & that I had NOT failed her...still, I'm forgiving of others, but far too hard on myself...I suppose I thought I should have been psychic...we've gotten past it all now...Thanks for your Wisdom, Deena...Be well, Poet...
Wanda
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You can't always be there for someone else,as much as it hurts to feel you have failed them....You have not. Life is so hard when you carry the weight of others upon your strong,but human shoulders. You cannot carry a friendship on your own,it takes two.
Take Care,
Deena
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Thanks for reading, dreamdemon5291...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Thanks for a great comment...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks for reading, Diohnysius...I thought I knew it, too...sometimes we have to re~learn lessons in Life...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks for a beautiful comment, AngelEyes711...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks for reading, shiftyfrank...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks for a great comment, iwa1...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Beautiful. absolutely beautiful... I LOVED this! Almost in tears..as anyone know how that is...wonderful write! much luck to you in the future
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awesome
i loved, loved, loved it. i learned to never take friends for granted a while ago, cherish every one of them as if they were ur only one. -
Brilliance True Gold In Heart & Soul!
Utter Perfection, Night Hope,
As you sing to your friend
In your heart of pure heaven.
How many times do we not hear others cry?
As you walk in the light hearing her “windchime”
Your song is strength in tears of true redemption.
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Thanks, pink...it's really not one of my favorites, for the simple fact of why I wrote it...& I try to always leave a Light on...yet, it seems to have struck a chord with many people, which is good...If what I wrote can make people stop & think about what they say & do, then it was worth the pain of writing it...Thanks for hosting a great contest...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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beautiful poem
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I like a friend like you
You Are a good friend because your gentle heart remembers the pain of one you love -
this is my favourite of the poems you submitted, it really touched me, great write....
thanks
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Thanks for reading, SJackson...Welcome to AP...I'm glad ya liked it..Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks for reading, Forest Shades...I'm glad ya liked it..Be well, Poet... Wanda
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This poem was beautiful. You gave it so much meaning. It really inspired me.
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this was really great, i loved it, so sweet and well formed. nice job
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Thank you, poetic ashleigh...Indeed, it did come from my heart...& it reached out to hers, as well...Sometimes, we mistake someone's silence for not caring anymore, when in reality, they care very much...it reminded me to never assume & to always ask...Thanks for reading...& welcome to AP...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Beautiful
Its a beautiful poem, and you do deserve all of you comments because its clear this poem came straight from the heart. -
Thanks for reading, love me softly...I hope you were able to make amends with your Friend, too...
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Thank you for your kind words, xTinkerbellx...
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wow thats deep, excpecially for me cuas ei have done that too
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This was really beautiful. Your emotions in this piece where so clear and your words really had alot of power to them. It was a well written and beautiful piece. I loved the ending I think thats true of us all, sometimes we do not see what is still there. Nice write x
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Thanks for reading, lindadoster...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Thanks for reading...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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touching lindadoster
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wow so powerful. i know i've been in a simlar situation with a friend but you capture it and portray it in such a amazing way. and it has such good imagery and word choice to set the kind of mellow, dreary mood. nice job!
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Thank you...I'm glad you enjoyed it...Thanks for comin' by...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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lovd yer story
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Thanks for reading...this one's kinda sad, but it ends well... Wanda
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Aww what a pretty poem, it's sooo oooooo ooooooo ooooooooooooo perfect, especially this:
It doesn't matter
what I say ~
what I do ~
I cannot make up
for abandoning
my Friend
when she needed me
the most ~
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WOW!!!!!! i feel the emotion so well in this piece.. i know wat it is like to be let down and i know wat its like to let down others. such an awful feeling. Awsome poem though..
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Thank you, bubblesnift...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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amazin piece of work........got me pretty emotional......tugged at every string of my heart.......
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Thanks for reading...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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very good
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Heartfelt
AW this just rips my heart out, an superb intro-reflective piece that is heartfelt and heartbreaking at the same time.
Much enjoyed.
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it was very interesting and true!
This was great and very thought out and i once felt the same way about my friend great job.... -
This is a flawless poem, and contains everything I look for in a write. You put down your thoughts so beautifully, and this poem shows this. Seeya around the site!
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this is beyond words, it is simply exquisite, so raw, so honest, absolutely perfect, flawless, the emotion, the sentiment, the imagery, there is nothing i can say, i am awestruck, hugs, excellent write, best thing i have read in i don't know how long
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It's wonderful to see our mistakes and be able to apologise and hopefully be forgiven. Bless you, I'm straight from Presences matching poem. ~ Beautiful. Peace and Joy Tara
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Thanks, Danna... Wanda
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Thank you for your lovely words, Electrasy...I'm glad you liked it...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Wow, that is incredible. I am holding back tears. Great job.
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What a heartache! Pain does sometimes cause blind spots wherein we don't see outside ourselves very clearly. Your poem is tender and reaching. Blessings on you and your friend.
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excellent writing
This is lovely Night Hope. I sometimes suffer in silence too. It is not good. Reaching out for a friend is a very healing thing, this I have learned as I grow older. Keeping emotions inside is like poisoning your soul. I am happy that you and your friend have each other.
etherealforu 
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Brilliantly crafted ... Two thumbs up!!
The heart-felt words here are volumnous in their echoes as deeply I look within and feel the past tremors of the same emotions here you have so eloquently portrayed This is a magnificent piece of conscience and truly cast with your magnificent thumbprint Kudos!! May your friendship become bound with psychic glue 
... Excellent lines... and thoughts... "I could not hear
the echo
of the fragile pieces
tinkling,
a windchime in distress,
battered by the tempest... Awesome!! Truly brilliant Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors Two thumbs up!! Have a glorious day... Magna cum Magnolia
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Thanks for understanding Wanda again I'm sorry Helen
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No worries, Helen...sometimes a poem provokes a strong reaction in the reader...it's happened to me, too...'s ok, Sweetheart...
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I know this poem was pulled from deep within, weaved with strings pulled from the heart... It is so beautiful in is sadness and honesty, my friend and one of those poems that is never easy to write. Yet, you make it flow so easily, so gently..and what a wonderful way of reaching out and touching the "silent one". As Robin has said above, we may be very intuitive souls, but we can't mindread - people also need to open up to let us see and to let us enter their scared ground. I so understand this poem, Vlindertjie...but I applaud your courage...in the end you did hear the "windchimes" and that is the most important. Beautiful tender piece of soul
~ Nicolette
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I'm sorry Wanda I'm removing my original comment I should not have said anything on your beautiful poem to take away from what the true sentiment was.Forgive me for any comments caused by it Love Helen
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I for one think ties must be severed sometimes because the person happens to be vicious and life draining of all your time and energy. I know , Trust me of that one. Frankly I should learn to stop the he-said-she-said crap a long time ago..But I never learn I guess. To sum it up , I accept lies too much and get treated like crap and called horrible names , I keep a straight face while they utterly and horribly walk and tear my feelings apart with paranoid delusions of who they think I am. The mistrust is the worst part. Always made to be the bad guy. And I still stick by them. Why? Because I give a shit to begin with...Until , Of course , I realize that I am simply being used. I am usually the memory of someone who had hurt them in the past or a person to blame for all their short-comings.
And that is what the poem has brought out. This is
very well-written darling and I'm glad you posted.
You let me connect with you on an even more personal
level.
Love ya darling ,
James
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Beautiful
Wanda,
This piece is touches me in a way that is difficult to describe. I identify with this so much--I had to read it about 15 times... This perfect piece is a great note to reconnect with your friend. I'm sure that when she reads this she will feel your what is in your heart even deeper than I do.
Good luck rebuilding things with her.
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It does not matter how close you are to someone, never ever expect yourself to be a mind-reader. We are but mere humans, and we listen and we see but we can not know what is hidden. I'm sure whatever and whoever this is about, understands completely that you didn't know how bad they needed you. Beautiful words to soothe a friendship Wanda. I hope whoever this is about is waiting with open arms for you.
~Lyrical
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I agree with the other comments Wanda, I'm sure your friend knows how much you care and this poem reaffirms that You've got a soul as big as the universe, and all who love you can feel the warmth of your endless suns
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Wanda, this is extraordinary in both it's beauty, and honesty. Not in a looooong time, have I read anything that flowed as smooth as this does. It's as if your very hearts blood were flowing onto this page. How very beautiful, and moving, my dear friend. Your words touch the heart with tender fingertips, and caress the soul with gentle hands. I am in tears here! She will weep tender tears when she reads this, as your heart speaks so very clearly. Don't judge yourself so harshly, as you remain, and always will remain, a shining beacon of hope and friendship to many...your friend, and I included. True friendship endures all. You offer such a rare glimpse into your very soul here, Wanda, and it's beautiful. Love ya, Wander Woman...always.
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love it
This is a very emotional poem.. I love your work! Your friend will never give up unless you do! Friends are always going to be the one's cheering you on... I know your friend love's you! Great job on the POEM!!
Alexis
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It is impossible to be there for everyone all the time. We need to take care of ourselves too. I know, you still feel like crap when you find out you let someone down. Don't be so hard on yourself.
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Lovely
I love this poem with the essence of myself. Your poem is a treasure to me. What else is there to measure in life other than friendship? Our friendship with God and then people? And being a friend may be rooted in work ethic but its the moments of silent trust and joy that make every dispute and cold shoulder fizzle away.
God Caress Everything
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It did hurt, Kels...& yeah, things are gettin' better...we're talkin' again, at any rate...Presence designed the background & sent me some tree pictures, too...gorgeous, aren't they??? Love ya, my literary daughterly unit thingy... Swans
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Wow.... I'd almost say it sounds like it hurt to write, but I'm sure it felt better when you finished. I'm glad to see things are starting to work out better--it really sucks to feel like you've lost someone, especially when that's not the full story. Good luck with this friend--knowing you, you'll figure out how to make things even better than they were. Beautiful poem--it probably has one of the best flows I've ever read--and lovely picture/background. Love ya!
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Indeed...I have been blind...
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Thank you, my Friend...But I am my own best & worst judge...I'm harder on myself than on anyone else...Everyone else, I forgive...
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leaving what you thought was already gone... much like losing what you didn't know you had... only different... hmmm... lol OK... well, it looks like it worked out well in the end, and it is nice to be needed? and to that, ironically, we are most blind of all...
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This shadow light shifts
it floats like mist
as I see here
then it suddenly disapears.
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Sometimes it's hard to hear the message even when another person thinks it's loud and clear. Don't be too harsh on yourself, dear friend. Anyway, your poem is beautiful. I love the phrase "a windchime in distress"
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Thank you very much, Cobalt Blue...I don't like it, though...for the very reason that I had to write it at all...it made me ache...but I ached worse by keeping it bottled up...Thank you for your kind words...
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It is apologetic...very much so...Thanks for reading, Lyneun...I'm glad you liked it...
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No wonder I have you on my favorite list you are a absolutley brillant writter and this poem is once again wonderful. This is so filled with true beauty and emotion straight from the heart how could anyone not like this piece
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I'm not sure what to say to this poem. I liked it a lot. The way you said things, the subtle description... It was all crafted so beautifully. I can't say what I love most, because it all was so wonderfully written. I especially liked the last stanza, though. It sounded almost apologetic.
-Arias' Son
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