Orion watches
as carolers sing
on new fallen snow
I'll search for reindeer hoof prints
early the next morn'
Author notes
This is for an assignment for my tanka class.
There is much more to the tanka than I ever thought!
Written November 29th, 2005
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fabulous pivot line and kigo; and such a sweet inner thought ... very nicely done >>> GINA
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You have done a nice job tying this together. It really is far more complex than 5 lines isn't it?
You have a good feel for this and I hope to see more when the class is finished.
Susan -
I'm sure with your attention to detail and creative spirit you'll master this form in no time. Your presentation here, as always, is first class.
Sincerely,
Leo Long -
love the pivot, the subtle turn and gentle feel, simple yet profound...i'd say you've got this form down. blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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Dear Samplette,
I think you would like the tanka style. I'm just about wrapping up a class with AndrewHide. It is kinda like putting two haikus together with a pivot line that connects them. There are many aspects in the tanka that represent events, seasons, time changes....etc.
I am loving the form and what it represents, and where it orginated. Thanks for the read and comment.
Cheryl
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I saw Orion's Belt right away. It is a nice poem Cheryl. I am unfamiliar with this style.
Jim -
I never thought much about what goes in a tanka besides the meter...I will have to read up on it some more. This was very good. Love the vision it conjures up..
Sam
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This is very nice Cheryl, I see you are doing great with tankas! Loved the way you connected the poivot line, well done!
Mari
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Very pretty, Cheryl. This has a delicate feel with a touch of that Christmas magic. Lovely!~vj
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