Rain dances
coloring my windows
whirling prisms
soft taps
rhythmic tunes
reflecting memories
quick sigh
closing of the eyes
memories fly
vibrant flash
roaring thunder
ripping blackened skies
Once begun
Quickly ends
leaving formless silence
smile carved
chaotic life
openly free
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Written November 29th, 2005
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I love this. I saw myself sitting at a window with these thoughts. You did an amazing job descrbing the actions and the thoughts of a rainy day and contemplation, this was really good!
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Beauty is elegance, rain is pure. upon a window pane of onyx fire smoke, does hearts beat with such power and tranquility. your words paint oceans and your love, the world. this is beautiful MiLord. I love you
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I love when a moment in time is captured. Isn't our lives made of interconnected moments? They are so imporant. I gathered from you poem not only a vision of tranquil abating in time but also that rain is unchained, coming and going as it so wishes.
Good minimalism. Be Blessed
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this is an incredibley deep piece. the overall natural feel of this write is simply beautiful. as blue said, the form is smooth, yet it has a slight feel of a complete free write to it. also, i paricularly enjoyed this piece because it connects the beauty and chaotic calm of nature with the human element. i also liked the touches or imagery and metaphor in this poem, specifically the first "paragraph". overall, a great write.
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you did a excellent job at following your form on this poem it was smooth and easy for the reader to follow nice work!
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