Drifting free with broken chains
Wishing for a different change.
Smiling sad and living small
Hoping for the world to call.
Why is this and why is that?
Questions always growing fat.
Tired of sitting back in life
Waiting for an end of strife.
My heart within is crying out
A yearning screaming need to shout!
I feel a surging pulsing seed
An ache a longing to be freed.
I am a soul with open mind
Hoping for the truth to find.
Answer me and answer now
Tell me when and tell me how.
Yes I vent this anguished rage
By throwing words upon this page.
Still the need is not the same
As want does often lead to shame.
Slipping this into the past
Momentary doubt does last.
Someone help me take my hand
And pull me from this cursed sand.
Thus to be inquisitive
Is also learning how to live.
Frustration born of answers lost
Anxiety does draw its cost.
To live the questions ever hard
Wishful dreams will never guard
Stealing prayers from up above
When maybe all I need is love.
Author notes
'100% Emotion'
Written November 29th, 2005
A contest entry
- vent it out 2! by Lsh-x.
300 points, ended August 29, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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i loved every bit of this poem. i can totally relate
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'My heart within is crying out
A yearning screaming need to shout!
I feel a surging pulsing seed
An ache a longing to be freed.
I am a soul with open mind
Hoping for the truth to find.
Answer me and answer now
Tell me when and tell me how.'
I loved that verse.
Wow, this is a fantastic right, I love the rhythm.
Thanks for entering!
well done, and good luck!
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"Questions always growing fast" and lots of them here, about life and how to live. I really like this. You could try love but it's not always the answer either. Hope you have found some of what you were looking for when this piece was written.
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Wow. This pours with emotion. Excellent expression. A pleasure to read. ~Pam
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Oh I love the flow and rhyming in this vent/poem lol I think the only thing I would have done different is put periods at the end of your stanzas and put commas in some places but other then that and considering this was more of a rant then a poem but great both ways maybe that is beside the point. I love it either way great job
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good writting
good write keep up the good work -
Jecks,
I enjoyed this piece. I espescially liked your imagery: living small, fat questions, quick sand--a feast for the mind.
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Beautiful work, as always! I liked the imagery, epspecially in these lines:
Drifting free with broken chains,
Questions always growing fat,
By throwing words upon this page,
And pull me from this cursed sand
I quite liked the first stanza. It flowed very nicely and really set the stage for the rest of the poem. Excellent job. Good luck in the contest and all else!
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Read it like driving down the California Highways - fast paced and full of energy. I enjoyed the way you've been able to carve out so many things here with a strong ending statement. Thanks for sharing and well done.
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Thats a strong poem,filled with emotions and how you really feel.Good luck in the contest
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wow talk about emotion. well acutally sorry thats redundant i suppose. but i really admire how you made it ryhme without taking away from any feelings. good luck in this contest
<3 BK -
lessmushroomsintheovenwillhelpthepeas
this is quite a deap reflection on your views
some of the inherant mammel problems
ide say u could just be right though
u could hide effectivly im sure in your mammel cercits
forgetting your head coz your getin head...
easy
but im still Wishing for that different change u spoke off
unless it comes were fuked
peace
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awwwe this is really emotional stuff
i like it alot. especially the end. great work! keep it up!
love love-xx
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you can definatly feel the emotion here, i'll tell you that. this was amazing, and obviously pure. that's what a good poet is, someone who writes something truely from the hearts. great job.
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