Hush now, my brother, I'm here
You won't be ridiculed by me
Let go of each uncried tear
Listen now, there's nothing to fear
Look into my eyes, dear, and see
Hush now, my brother, I'm here
Forget it all while I'm near
Let everything go and be free
Let go of each uncried tear
Those silent sobs that I hear
I'm glad for them, they're healthy
Hush now, my brother, I'm here
I'll make the pain disappear
Do what you must, I decree
Let go of each uncried tear
Happiness must reappear
For that, I will kneel on each knee
Hush now, my brother, I'm here
Let go of each uncried tear
Author notes
Note that I DID NOT ask for a critical comment, so go the fuck away.
This has to be one of the most craptastic poems I have ever written in my entire life.
My first Villanelle. AbA2 abA abA2 abA abA2 abAA2 rhyme.
I damn this poem to the deepest pits of hell fire.
I loathe it. I despise it.
There is nothing anyone can say to make me like it, so just...don't.
You may risk getting me angry.
By the way.
This is about Muave comforting her brother, Diente. It's the first time they are ever romantically involved. Enjoy.
Not wait. I take that back. Don't.
Written November 29th, 2005
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Don't make love to it!!!! YOU'LL GET AIDS! Lmfao. Seriously, though...It's not THAT good. The idea is sweet...but that's about it. o o;
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Pffffffttttt; I'm not even going to say anything about this. Know why? 'Cause you'll yell at me and stuff. o o; AND, and, and.. Mm'hmm. I love this; adore it, admire it.. WANT TO MAKE LURVE TO IT.. But that won't change your mind about it, so yeah.. Lmao.
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Pfft...you can say whatever you like, my dear...but it won't change MY opinion.
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Well you know what I'M going to say. I have hell trying to rhyme words and the rhyming is off as well as the beat but it all fits here. You KNOW I'm an honest person so you can't be angry at me because I'm not lying. It's hard to do a villanelle but I think you did a great job of it Rose.
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I don't care if YOU (not I) like it...Just don't give me shit about how good it is.
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Erm. Not trying to make a Rose mad, but I like it. >.<
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