For MargaretG, it's got to be a sonnet,
Full fourteen lines of fulsome Birthday praise.
Without her, A.P.? Well, I'd not be on it,
For she has helped me through my darker days.
She's always positive in what she states,
She doesn't let a surplus comma by,
A Margaret comment sings, it never grates,
(Though weaknesses in syntax catch her eye.)
She never says, "this write of yours is awesome"
Nor uses rubbish like, "your entry rocks"
(It may, but hey, it can stick in my craw some,)
Instead of empty drivel, she just talks.
And courteous talk like hers is what I bless,
We'd all be poorer were we Margaret-less.
Author notes
Mony Happy Returns, hen...
Written November 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Birthday Bash For MargaretG! by Mari Goes.
800 points, ended December 8, 2005, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I think I'm between a rock and a hard place here. Rock on Tommy! Let's all get on the rocks without delay!
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Your poem rocks, great write, keep it up... aren't those annoying? Her comments are indeed very constructive, and her helpful hand has helped me lots of times, and still does
Now keep your socks on, smelly cheese I can't take! -
Dear Keith, if you wish to be writing
a sonnet, don't take off your socks!
Ten fingers are all you'll be citing,
iambic pentameter rocks!
Excuse my anapests. I love your changes, it makes a difference to mention things to you. 
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I'm glad you think this entry rocks
But next time I'll remove my socks
When syllables I estimate
Thanks for the comment, that was great
(The reason that I kept socks so
Was cheesy (you don't wanna know!) -
Well M., I cannae get them by
Your damn syllabic eagle eye
I've done a bit of pruning here
I think eleven now, my dear?
(If one of those don't have a stress
My sonnet isn't such a mess)
Only joking. It's a pleasure to have a bit of awesome criticism. -
Your entry rocks!
Man, want me to do something about her? You write a wonderful tribute and she offers up a slice of boloney! I know people that would break her fingers for a pack of cigarettes!
Well you said it so she had to prove it.
As far as comments, I wore her down...Margaret gave up on me a long time ago...I get the pat on the head treatment (which is all I want anyway.)
I tip my hat to you (I don't really have a hat...but if you insist I could get one,) it was a fine tribute that I know she appreciated because you spoke honestly about her character and her dedication to writing and her importance to you. -
Thank you Keith, this is not awesome but I love it anyway!
Is it ungrateful to offer criticism on a paean?
I don't know. If not, I wish you would do something with line 11, unless you count 10 syllables. Line 14 has a wild excess of sentiment and syllables both.
Thank you for joining the party, I'm working up a stanza for you.
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