I hate feeling like this
I am always left broken
I thought you were the one
The one for me
The one that would
ease my pain
But just like all the rest
You leave my side
I'm giving up on love
Love has never helped me
Just uses me and
tosses me aside
What did you think
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"I'm giving up on love
Love has never helped me"
I can't tell you how many times I've felt like that. It's such a frustrating place to be.
You know, I think the beauty in simplicity is something only very few people master, but I think you are very well on the way. However I do not so much care for this ending. It's not very strong and I definitely think you could come up with some better ending. Other than that - great work! -
Simplistic and effective. It's a place we all travel to at one point or another. The island of heartbreak surrounded by the seas of distrust.
A lot of people say it's better to have loved and lost than to have never of loved at all...I say, ignorance is bliss.
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wow i loved this poem it was a really great poem and i can definatly see where your coming from because i feel the same way about love your a great writer i loved it keep up the great work and thanks for sharing....LYLARTS
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this is a good poem. Simple, good flow, and strongly emotional. I am sorry things do not always work out, "How much I wish I could say, the sun gay off one solid ray."
Things often will go astray in our lives.. but we just have to learn to be content with what we do have.. I feel for you though, and wish for you only the best.
Edited on Dec 02, 2:02 p.m. because 'god told me to....'. -
aww this is so again, i can feel the pain in this piece, its hard to love someone who you think doesn't care, i've been there, well done and keep on writing xxx
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This clearly shows how hurt you were. Im sorry, I can feel it. You express your feelings so well. I was reading your other poems, And I think you have a talent. You have a way of telling the world the inner emotions, without expression or even opening your mouth. Just by writing, you can make a difference. This poem opened my eyes up. Thank you for sharing. Wonderful write, and an enjoyable read.
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ouch. i'm so sorry about this. don't give up though. there is a guy out there for you it just takes time to find him. i know from my own experiences. but i love where you say
I thought you were the one
The one for me
The one that would
ease my pain
that is true..great write -
this is a really great poem but what is going on? plz tell me so i know
LoVe Ya
~*BeCcA*~
*rose
you are a great writer
keep up the great and awesumly awesum work!!!!!! -
This poem describes exactly how I'm feeling right now. This is a very nice piece. Nice flow. Simple, yet with a deep meaning. I like. Please, keep writing! ^^
Edited on Nov 28, 4:18 p.m. because ''.
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