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Bastard love

 

Loving you is a rat in me 
            He walks and gnaws 
            He gives me no rest.

 

If I don't see you he's hungry. 
            Not feeding him, 
            I starve myself

 

When you are with me
            He leaps for joy. 
            And bites my heart

 

Oh take a knife and cut him out 
            even though 
            it rips me apart

 

Be shot of love - be shot 
            Of if and what  
            and what and if.

 

This bastard thing belongs to you 
            and now it's you 
            that makes me live.

Author notes

What love is - option 8. And I wrote it without being asked.
Written November 27th, 1900

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  • chills gold member
    July 2

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    Blow to the solar plexus, this. Yes, Vic, I am haunting myself again....! Just slap me. But this is raw and so very on the money.

  • SurrenderMyHeart
    February 22, 2006
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    very great


  • cvillelisa
    February 22, 2006
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    I had to click -- anything called Lurve.

    Robert Burns' A Red, Red Rose, I read it often. O my luve's like a red, red rose ..

    This is great. It does feel like that sometimes don't it? Reminds me of some of my favorite old time poets who were never afraid to say "oh my Love, how you wound me, slay me, take me down, leave me in the dirt -- Oh how i love you so and can't wait for you to do it again"

    I'm happy to have found you. You have a classic sense about your words that I appreciate.


  • Roxy02
    December 29, 2005
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    This was such an original write. I liked the whole concept of the poem, people often focus too much on the 'nice' side of love, or how much they hate someone so this was an interesting interpretation. Good length and it flowed very well indeed. To use an animal such as a rat was inspired, as some people see them as nasty creatures, whereas others keep them as pets, again echoing the different views of love.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    I like the comparison of love to one of those furry little rodents -- that can either be brilliantly amazing or wickedly troublesome.. love is never anything less than chaos.. is it ?

    not when it breathes on its own..

    Very nicely done.. it's complex, yet not so much so that it doesn't hit home..

    Liza

  • Ir.muse
    December 2, 2005
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    hmm..a nice look on love.Great. A nice poem.

    Shahrzad

  • Harlequin
    November 28, 2005
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    Outstanding,brilliant, what can I say? truely a masterpiece...Jeff


  • November 28, 2005
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    Great! weve all experienced the love rat and boy does he gnaw


  • Cat
    November 27, 2005
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    This actually reminds me of a Margaret Atwood poem. I think it's called a poet makes peace with her faulty heart. She in essence accepts the heart for how it has failed her and enabled her and she understands they are on a journey together. Anyhow- anything that brings to mind Margaret Atwood to me is definitely on a good track. I enjoyed this and have a feeling you did also.

    m

  • chills gold member
    November 27, 2005
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    Love is fresh rat's milk as my boys would say

    Yes, that love rat. This is very good vic - what (or whom) inspired this? Feel free not to answer if that's too nosey!!! x debs

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