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Ghost Army

Emptiness captures the land where men fought

Their enemies now serve its purpose for burial,

Engulfed a ghost army in the bedding material,

Where the ground he stumbled in trenches distraught

Now breathes smoke ashen upon land’s stray savage.

Playground rapture breathes who wander at night moans,

From concert stones and sunken skin turned bones.

Bare dangled limb decaying of fungus devastate ravages,

Its ghost armies on Skeleton ride the eve of defeat,

Left their swords and crest in open caskets,

Where rifles lay sealed as limb arm’s gasket,

Death seals the fire in the eye’s deceit.

On the innocence sunken now in coffins aspired,

In brilliance, leader confusion once in battle admired

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  • spideracer gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    Very sad truth

    Wow, your poem is indeed powerful, like I said before, it's a great poem with great imagery. You've done really well here bringing this crime of the Vietcong to light. Thanks for sharing.

  • spideracer gold member
    December 12, 2008
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    This poem has nothing to do with the contest, but I'm not the judge here so it doesn't matter. Great poem, great imagery and story telling, a poem worthy of applause and so I shall.

    • saddie23
      December 12, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the comment given to my poem. I thought the host for the contest dq my poem, guess not. Even though, before I forgot this contest was on carnival souls I entered by mistake. I'm glad you liked it. This was based on the actual events of the Vietnam War. There was a few MIA's and POWs that were abused in the hands of a small group of soldiers known as the Ghost Army. The Vietcong kept moving United States soldiers left and right in different camps and abused and killed them for the just the pleasure of torture. This poem is my parody of the true events held then. Saddie23

  • saddie23
    December 9, 2008
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    Thank you

    If you want to DQ my poem thats ok. I could write a new one for the contest if thats ok with you. Saddie23


  • Fenrir Rising
    December 9, 2008

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    has nothing to do with the contest...this is why alot of people don't permit pre-writes, cause some people feel the need to enter things with little to zero relevance to the contest


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 13, 2008

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    NIce to b e able to use this in more than one contest - like it when prewrites are allowed. COngratulations on the previous trophies already one. Liked the rhythm rhyme and flow of these lines and the images hsares through your words.

    • saddie23
      June 13, 2008
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      thank u

      Thank u for the wonderful comments given to my poem. And I do agree with u about using a prewrite in more than one poem contest. Its great when the moderators finally changed the fundamentals of posting our poetry. Where finally evolving as poets with a little help of our friends. Saddie23


  • daviscth silver member
    February 26, 2008
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    Thanks so much for posting in my contest.
    Cathy


  • daviscth silver member
    February 25, 2008

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    I got goosebumbs fro reading this one. It felt all to real! Thanks so much for posting in my contest, Cathy.

    • saddie23
      February 25, 2008
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      Thank u

      Thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my poem. Saddie23


  • ArmyRangerAngel
    April 24, 2007
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    thank you for entering in this poem into my contest I enjoyed it

    • saddie23
      April 24, 2007
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      Thank you

      Wow! Thank you for having this contest, and thank you for commenting. Saddie23

  • saddie23
    April 15, 2007
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    thank you

    Wow! I didn't expect to win, but thank you. I've been studying my finals and I'm trully sorry that didn't take time to critique other contestant. Woo!Hoo! I won. Saddie23


  • Sokarjo
    April 15, 2007
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    Excellent. I love ghosts and the like, and your descriptions are great. Thanks for this excellent entry!
    By the way, my brother, Diddashn, is sick, so I am now your judge. He just asked me to judge this contest, and I hope to get it done today. Thanks for your entry and patience.


  • Lively Matter
    March 27, 2007

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    Bravo!!! The rhyming scale was a little wierd so the flow to me wasn't very good but otherwise i loved it, I really like the ending. Thanks for entering and good luck

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