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heartburn!

i fall in love too easily,i fall in love to fast,i fall in love too terribly hard for love to ever last!i fell in love with the girl next door,slim,fair and cute;but she wanted someone across my floor adoring him from head to foot!i fell in love with Julia,hey i'd swim through fire to be with ya!she left him for a rich punk,all muscles and no funk!!Next was Sherry,with lips like strawberry,i lost my cool when in her presence but smiling sweetly she said to me,"Ken lets just be friends!".

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pls comment on this piece for me.i was heart broken when i wrote it!
Written November 27th, 2005

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  • illianna rose
    November 27, 2005
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    well versed

    I can feel you pain and have been there one too many times. Very well put. please keep writing and thank you for sharing

  • MyHeartBleedsNoMore
    November 27, 2005
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    That's sad...thanks for the comment on my poem, stranger btw.

    -Leah

  • Luminous1
    November 27, 2005
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    I am the same way..I think most people could relate to your poem..


  • Hot goth 101
    November 27, 2005
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    wow that would suck. i feel for ya man that hadda hurt