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Attraction

Looking into your eyes,
feeling the passion,
the desire.
Reminiscing of the words you said
sending a sensation through my veins
making my whole body tingle.
Waking up next to you,
gives me a fresh renewed feeling
a feeling i've never felt.
A feeling i know we share.

Author notes

just feelings i feel when i am with someone. I have had writers block for quite some time so..PLEASE LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK!
Written November 25th, 2005

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  • Chu
    December 20, 2005
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    i like this, not as much as the first one I commented on. that is truly a hard act to follow.
    The meaning in this ones deep and flows nicely.


  • All washed up
    December 18, 2005
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    This is indeed a simple poem, and a good way to show someone that you care. It is heartfelt and meaningful. I also see something in here that you can link to a few of your other poems. You seem to be obsessed with eyes. I know that I am. Good job on this one.. gotta go read more.


  • November 25, 2005
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    Simple and elegant.
    Thats how I see this piece, and thats a very good thing, in my case, its hard for me to write elegant poetry, so i admire your ability.
    I especially loved
    "Waking up next to you,
    gives me a fresh renewed feeling"
    Because its so true how waking up next to someone you love can feel that way.
    yes indeed, great job! What a way to come out of writers block, its amazing what love can do, no?
    Keep writing!


  • Silent Rapture
    November 25, 2005
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    one word
    exqusite


  • silverscent gold member
    November 25, 2005
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    What a lovely poem. I like the simplicity and the gentleness of it. I hope this poem helps you out of your writers block. I'm going through the same thing at the moment, and have just posted my first in a while. My only suggestion for this is to capitalise every "I". Well done, keep writing.


  • Indrid Cold
    November 25, 2005
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    This is an extremely simple poem, but that's not a bad thing. It's a very good thing in fact. I really loved this poem because it shows the beautiful relationship felt between two people. Two people who are in love. It's wondreful and sweet and fantastic!
    Great write and keep up the good work.
    Dominik

  • Spacemonkey77
    November 25, 2005
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    Very Good

    I love this Poem... very Romantic and Expressive... I wish I felt this Way...lol

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