myself
no one can save me but myself
self
self
stronger than before
because
what has happened (this crazy year)
won't break me
nothing can
keep trying please
beat me down
your nonexistent morals and rotten self esteem
yes mother it's rotten
from the very core
oh you know it's true
the self denial will only last so long
why don't you spend a little more money
i know
it makes it all go away, doesn't it?
maybe if you lie to me some more
of course your next sentence will be about how bad lying is
but it's all ok
because you're always right
raise me to be perfect
but mother,
if i grew up the way you wanted me to,
i would be the most
c
r
o
o
k
e
d
person
in the whole bunch
the whole damn bunch
it's just all so disheartening, mother
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Written November 24th, 2005
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fantastic!
This is a poem motivated by one of the very things that intrigues me so.... Peanut butter. Yes it's true, peanut butter was clearly the motivater. mmmm...this peanut butter sandwich is really good. Whoops! sorry bout that, got distracted. Its just this sandwich is soooo good! wait a sec, I get it now.....I Had a "realization " of how good this sandwich is! Not so hard to figure out this one indeed. Oh yeah your poem is good! keep it up!!!!!!lol! No of course I'm not crazy! -
Realization: I know what it's like to reach that, I do. This is a very good poem!! I love it when people have something that bothers them, and they write about. Alot of people don't realize how much that helps. This is very well written. I wish you all the best and I hope things get better for you!
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WOW Ashley.... this is so beautiful!!! I'm sorry you had such a crazy year!!! I would support jess if she went to kidnap you!!!!
... keep up the good work!!!
Hugs,
Beth -
Awww Ashley, this is so painful and sad and heartwrenching. Do i need to come take you away? I don't like seeing you so down and sad and hurt. If I need to, I'll kidnap you and take you back with me to Mars!
I love you hun, just remember that. There are so many people here that love you. This was very well written. Great job my dear!
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Jess -
It is realy a touching write revealing the depth of the dilemma through and through. The thoughts are very painful stating the deep sorrow of the notions grown up in respect to the treatment given to the innocent heart which is really a matter of the debate. The beauty of the write lies in its deep and honest statements given with full sincerety and full truth with. The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too. I really appreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar
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Very emotive, very true poem. Nice job. I hope that you found writing this poem healing. I've been in a similar situation and I found writing very cathartic. I hope it is similarly so for you. Take care.
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