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For you i suffer pain so sweet,

For you i suffer pain so sweet,
for you i open beautiful rivers in my meat,
for you i drip red and make art on the floor
for you i want to hurt much much more
for you i want from everything run
for you i denied ever to walk in the sun
for you i make drawings on my skin
for you i want to commit any sin

for you

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this is an actual and original picture. it is meant to illustrate the pain we all suffer, some mentally and some physically. I dont mean to offend anyone by putting it here only to illustrte
Written November 24th, 2005

A contest entry

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  • Rainydaywoman
    December 6, 2005
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    Fabulously written

    I thought that you did a wonderful job portaying pain that we suffer for someone, or something. I disagree with moonlight- I thought this poem flowed nicely as it ran through my head. Wonderful. If it offends anyone, forgettabouit!- Harper


  • d-amour gold member
    November 26, 2005
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    indeed it could be love or something else? but its just to make someone aware i guess, how painful emotions at times can be

  • retard
    November 25, 2005
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    a lovely poem.
    too many things to do for someone else. but that's love i guess.


  • Senior09
    November 25, 2005
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    this poem didnt have much of a flow and i couldnt feel the pain u were trying to share. i felt little but thats it. i dont like that u kept saying "for you" it by the end of the poem got annoying. and maybe u should describe what happend to make u that way, what color was the piture (although i already know and probably most other ppl) and what kind of picture was it, types like that to make it longer cause for a poem as short as this with emotion behing this subject u should make it a lil longer...well goodluck in the contest, and goodluck in future poems.

    Moonlight


  • d-amour gold member
    November 24, 2005
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    thanks too much of this and i want need helium to fly, he he he (read my page if you want to understand) but its apreciated that you take time to read and share your opinions


  • bezs hummingbird
    November 24, 2005
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    omg! i love this! ive felt pain like this b4. it doesnt offend me. dont worry. i think youre a very talented poet. every poem ive read just gets better and better!

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