Your soft cooling skin is like silk,
your eyes staring full of fear like dead stars.
The whitening colour of your face white like milk,
You are no longer able to give me emotional scars.
your screams made me feel alive again after so long,
the sins we committed were so many.
But this final act of sin were full of life worth a song.
You had no final wishes just begging for mercy,
not that i would have granted any.
The struggle you made before finally resigning,
were your last gift to me after so long time of abuse.
I am finally grateful for our relationship cant you see,
your death rescued me.
Even dead you look beautiful
Author notes
Written November 23rd, 2005
A contest entry
- Bloody Dream by Hidden Phoenix.
500 points, ended February 28, 2006, 23 entries
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OOOOOOOOOOooooooooo!!
A real chiller here... shivers and bright eyes! 
Fine writing, poet! 
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do not remove this while in contest
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So strong and very beautiful. I love poems about death. Especially ones as powerful as this; I actually got shivers. The imagery was great in this, you did an excellent job. You really pulled the reader in.
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"I am finally grateful for our relationship cant you see,
your death rescued me.
Even dead you look beautiful "
This part made me shiver. i love this! its so chilling yet heartbreaking.
good luck in the contest -
i love this, it's so beautiful it made me shiver
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wow. this starts out so.. sweet, almost, and then takes on a really tragic side. it seems like there are definite undertones of statements about justice and mercy... but anyway, really well-done poem! beautiful.
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dark
I truly understand the feelings, the emotions as I have sometimes wanted... but hey we all have dark desires sooner or later -
dark and beautiful
wow. nice fantisy! i like this in a way, its weird but so am i
very discriptive too. can't live with em, can't kill em...but one can always dream. lol -
Beautiful darkness
An excellent piece of writing here. I really like well written dark poems. Peace, Sharon x -
My life? The poem...or my actual living and breathing this putrid air life?
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My life? The poem...or my actual living and breathing this putrid air life?
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thanks for the warm words. well i have several interesting ideas, but i just need the words to come out on the paper.
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I love poems that have to do with dark people, especially demonic people (not that I would know which category this falls into...). Great job and keep it up...
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this is awesome it reminds me of my poem you lied you cheated and now its time to die rock on dude two thumbs up and love the fav poem its mine two its awesome ne way keep up the good work
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Dark. Really dark, d-amour. I don't know if I like this, but I understand it. Emotional abuse could make some snap, and kill those hurting them. I wish you best of luck in the contest!
Jim
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