The snap of her neck was almost poetical. The sound made me think of the first beat of a human drum machine. My fangs retracted now, leaving two sweet drops of blood on my lips. I swallowed. Why i killed her? because it felt natural tonight. Other nights i might have left her in a trash-can alive and only drained for some face colour. She was a low life anyway, a street girl hanging around pubs wanting beer from men. I paid her beer alright. he he. but she made my night so why not. How stupid some humans are. Her blood tasted bitter, I sensed it too late. She had a boobjob done to make those beers come over the bar quicker and to distract attention from an ugly remodelled face. Some samples of silicone was in the blood, poluting it. Hm, that might be the reason i killed her after all. She poluted my food. Her face looks better now. All white and without any red. The rouge is comical indeed. I drop her to the ground. Smiles and venture down the street. Well girl, i hope the beer tasted good.
Author notes
want a beer from me?
Written November 23rd, 2005
A contest entry
- Fiend Angelical- A Dark Prose Contest aka Vent!!! by Ayla YellowRose.
500 points, ended December 16, 2005, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
-
There are a few errors in this piece but I love the vampire-ness...it's so...dark
great job!
-
Such excellence written of a favourite topic of mine. I love the tiny details in this piece...the description of what the girl was, how pointless her life was before it was taken. Some of the ways you described things was magnificent. I am absolutely in love with the line "the rouge is comical indeed". Thank you so much for entering, this really is a gem. ( A blood red one
)
-
You're a vampire! So this is why you buy drinks for the girls when you're out on the town. 
Wonderful po- eh... ramblings, d-amour. Liked how your short story in a way explained that it was in fact a mercy killing. I'm definately applauding this one! I wish you best of luck in the contest, I put my stake in - eh... on you. Jim
Edited on Nov 24, 11:39 because 'Why? Ehm... forgot y.
'.
Adding your comment:
2 old applause
