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Mrs protheroe


MRS PROTHEROE

The Night Your Landlady Came To Your Room

by Robert Davidson

A loose gown in which her flesh swam free
Fascinated
Your eyes resting diffidently, the full white breasts
The shadowed cleft
Your mind searching the unknown
Hesitated, resisted
Locked within the closed circle of yourself.

Broken into tears
She moaned your name against your mouth
Said her old man had deserted the year before. You saw
Silver tears sliding down the sad moonlit face.

She said you were too withdrawn within yourself =
You kept to your room, too much alone, she said. And so lost
Lying on your bed, reading Schopenhauer late at night
You were reading everything yet could believe in nothing, you said.

She clinging to you with her mouth
Arousing. Inflaming flesh. You losing the will to resist
You would solve the mystery of yourself, you thought
As your bodies took the shapes of passion
You would come out of yourself in this long waited moment.

She searching your boy's body for the lost images of youth
The skin stretching transparently on your ribs
She making a moaning, loving sound
While taking the taste of you with her tongue -
And you holding tightly the muscles of her plump white thighs
As interlocked her body became as one with yours.

When you opened your eyes
Your room. your books still preserved their apparent shapes
Despite long shadows in pools of early morning light
She was as a rock to which we cling, you thought
She was the rock of love
On which we all have founded, you further thought.

And as you wandered deeper into yourself, no longer lost
You felt you'd slithered down a solid slope. sensible
Of a dream-time womb in smooth transparent skin
While she lay prone and spent on you -
And for a moment you felt as wise as God.

Love? - an equation for two bodies -
Or the subtler colloquy of disparate souls?

Author notes

The Night Your Landlady Came To Your Room
Written November 22nd, 2005

A contest entry

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Quite an iteresting write. Had me captivated from start to finish with its unique story! Thanks for entering my contest. I’m honored that you would show your work here. Keep up the great writing!


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    August 6, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • whiterabbit.
    December 18, 2007
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    the details and imagery are wonderful. great job


  • uziphiel
    December 4, 2007
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    tyipically the rules are your not suppose to use the word love but i love the question at the end so I am going to allow it please place the wordz does (this make you happy!) in the authors notes! anyone who does not by the time I make my final call will not be placed ty


  • Miss Kristy
    November 5, 2007
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    Gorgeous

    This is such a beautiful poem, so in touch with everything. Very beautiful.
    x x x


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 1, 2007
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    September 7, 2007
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    This is a beautiful piece, entered into SOooo many contests.... you have done a wonderful job of portraying the picture you wanted to paint

    Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck

    Karen


  • azlyn gold member
    July 25, 2007

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    Very sensual and classy. Loved the poem...flowed so well and told of feelings and emotions running so freely! Thanks for entering!
    Blessings,
    Azlyn


  • TwistedTatum
    June 25, 2007
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    The imagery! Ah, very good job on the poem. I enjoyed reading it


  • alexandrathegreat
    June 23, 2007
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    Interesting plot from the start. Being with an older woman can be very intense you made this evident in your poem, why the equals sign in the third stanza? The images you use make me feel like I was really there. The ending is nice, thank you for entering, no phrase in comment box though


  • coffeeangel316
    June 14, 2007
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    great poem/ this is awesome


  • Sonofdead
    June 2, 2007

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    Good poem. I like this one. Its easy to read, I don't have to think that much to understand what is going on.

    When you opened your eyes
    Your room. your books still preserved their apparent shapes
    Despite long shadows in pools of early morning light
    She was as a rock to which we cling, you thought
    She was the rock of love
    On which we all have founded, you further thought.

    I like this bit right here. Good luck.


  • Emerald Dreams
    May 31, 2007
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    Good Write. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    Emerald Fire


  • remembering Jo
    May 31, 2007
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    i enjoyed it but you didnt half enter yourself for a lot of contests


  • arafura gold member
    May 15, 2007
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    Well written...

    Serves you right for reading Schopenhauer!


  • Griswold gold member
    May 15, 2007

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    Nice

    Very well done, seemed to me as a dream, one which we can taste and feel... Wanting it so badly but afraid of what it will bring..Scott

  • igobysammy
    May 15, 2007

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    whoa...so where do i sign up? well. uh, hmmm. It appears to be quite erotic...and uh, well, im impressed, and well, excited. Good Job.


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 14, 2007

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    This has sure been entered into many contests - situation a bit like Mrs, Robinson movie - easy to read and understand what's going on here - sensual and flowing.


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    May 14, 2007
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    I have read this once before when it was in my last contest....still a hot one! Good luck

    **Master Ktulu**


  • MahoganyFlow
    May 12, 2007

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    Intriguing poem! You expressed the lust, seduction, and the lonliness so well! Loved the imagery! Good Job and good luck in the contest!


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    May 8, 2007

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    This is a very Hot write. You did an excellent job. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    **Master Ktulu**


  • silent bee
    May 7, 2007

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    very sensual, seductive...and just great. the imagery in this piece is amazing! thank you for entering and best of luck to you!

    ~bee


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    May 6, 2007

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    Very sensual piece,,,I could envision the seduction of a younger man with an older woman,
    sounds as if it may have potential for a nove


  • Talia
    May 5, 2007

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    This is an excellent write, I could see this as a novel or something too. I think it has and holds a great deal of potentail. Good job!

    Good luck in the contest

  • Melody Of Love
    May 4, 2007

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    Very well written and expressive but not really what I was looking for. I was looking for romance not lust. But if lust is what I was looking for this woudl be a winner. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck. DJ


  • Sunday Rain
    May 3, 2007
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    ok

    I do like this poem,
    & it's very,
    Lustful,
    So Great Job!

    & good luck!
    & also,
    Everyone else's comment's are right...
    Entering in more then one person's contest at the same time, it is annoying,
    but I wont dis.q you over it...


  • insecure princess
    May 3, 2007

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    most excellent

    most beautiful.
    i really enjoyed this piece.
    excellent write.
    thank you for entering my contest & good luck
    ♥ jade =]


  • bird-mad girl
    April 29, 2007
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    I loved how this was more than just an erotic piece. It had more depth and meaning. there was an actually message that didn't scream SEX! in big bold newspaper print. It was beautiful and captured emptiness and the need to be with someone. very beautiful.


  • Pollycheck
    April 26, 2007
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    Thank you for subjecting yourself to my review. I think that this is a very well written poem. You spin a tale of loneliness and desperation very well. Althought this is not the type of poetry I normally read, I enjoyed it very much. I think overall, this is a very good write.


  • grass
    April 23, 2007

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    Hm. I like how sensual this is and your use of imagery. The contest thing gets on my nerves too, but whatever. I like sexual poems that aren't overly stereotypical and just sort of actually express the different levels of sexuality. We, as people, are all sexual by nature. I just sort of wish society was a little more in-tune with that. Back to your piece. I like the way your character seems realistic. It's nice. Your tone is colloquial, but refined. Good job.


  • Trixie08
    April 23, 2007

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    I really do like this one; it's a great sensual piece and tells it from a whole different point of view I loved how you wrote it in thrid person that's not usual for erotic poetry. but, this one sets itself apart from the others and is truly one to be remembered. I loved the flow and your diction the words you chose just flowed beautifully. Great Write and Best of luck in the contest.


  • lie
    April 20, 2007

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    The phrasing is very different, and it's quite confusing for me. The "She..." parts would read much better is there was an apostrophe S after each one. I understand the tense you're trying to present, but it's not really working in my opinion.
    On a more personal note, I really don't like when poems are listed under many other contests, I find it simply annoying.
    Anyways, back to the poem; you made the piece sensual without becoming overtly sexual or corny, which is good thing.
    I like the ending and the way you were able to definitely deepen the theme and subject. The title kind of simplifies the piece, which I think oddly fits.
    Overall, this is pretty good. We'll see what Liberation of Sense says; I'm not sure if the the subject is to her liking. Thank you grandly for entering.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 18, 2007

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    Thanks for this sexy entry... Your paragraphs at the top went a bit weird... Well, they are different and change half way through which is a little odd... Just thought I'd let you know

  • mcheadle
    April 7, 2007
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    moving very moving as all went with you


  • shysky
    March 30, 2007

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    Thank you for entering my contest, this was a very good read, i do appreciate it


    ~A Heart's Hope Lies With Belladonna~


  • Beautyfull-x-Angel
    March 30, 2007

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    i liked the poem but the flow was a lil hard to follow other then that great write and keep up the good work. Thank you so much for entering


  • Myjoy gold member
    March 26, 2007
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    Bravo

    Wonderful! Very visual and a wonderful story. I loved it, well done.

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