Once I was worshipped
But now I am merely banished
My sins are eternal
And through blood I am released
You once knew my name
But now tremble at its sound
You had given me your essence
But now you wish me gone
You need ones like me
For I am your dark side
You still burn the candle
Yet you now seek to bind me
Do you forget the power I gave you
Do you not realize the power I control
These walls cant hold me
I am my own prison
My hands still grasp at your heart
I am the one who turned it black
You belong to me now
You never should have opened my door
Your blood runs over my lips
What is this I taste
Aaahh its just your rage
Your rage only personifies who I am
You see me in your dreams
And you welcome me with a kiss
A kiss so strong that Even I feel your love
You love me yet you loathe me
You are just as my father was
Now I wait the day I am Reborn
Author notes
option #4 Where i get my namesake
Written November 22nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Trophy winning free verse by silver bugs.
350 points, ended January 6, 2006, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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...Bloody Hell ...
You're a Grand writer mate . I'll give you that ...This bit Reminds me of other things tho ...
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wowwwwww
this is the first poem of yours Ive read, its wonderful.I like the way you suond as though these words come from one of the crowned princes of the underworld (if you know the story). very good
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wowww
this is really deep. i like that you can write a poem that ISN'T so long it should be classified as a novel and still show a lot of emotion. I also like how many people can relate to this poem, but it isnt a cliche and it is unique.
great write!
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This was intense, very dark.
Do you not realize the power I control
These walls cant hold me
I am my own prison
My hands still grasp at your heart
I am the one who turned it black
You belong to me now
Gave me chills really.
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this is kick ass dude u got more like this ?
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dude wow
that is totaly getting ur feelins out there
so much anger and rage
its HOT -
ohhhhhhhh
Your rage only personifies who I am
You see me in your dreams
trippy..head goes tippy.! very dark and a wonderful write..feels like a strong emotion is running wild thorugh ap!
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This is really chilling, dark, morbid but something I really enjoyed. You're a very talented poet and this poem deserves its trophy. Sorry for taking a while to judge this contest, my internet has been giving problems. Good luck
♥
~Lana
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I AM MY OWN PRISON TOO FUCKING TRUE
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Trapped in emotions such as these shows much pain! But somewhere along the line, you reveal that you have some control of the situation, which, with, that last line that you are ready to give up. Finish this verse with a happy stanza or two, hopefully!! I'll read this agin sometime!
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Hey i dig this poem .^_^ It has an inner... darkness about it, oddly enough. It's not hating, or even mocking.. there's just this.. smug... 'i am what I am and I wont apoligize for it' tone to this... anywho, I joined your contest and I am very glad I read your poem.. I beleiev I might read some more. THank you for the read-- by the way-- i read your page.
^_^ You're a very personable person .^_^ I think Im going to enjoy adding you to my favorites.
Holla.
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/sweet/ ahaha
Love it
I love poetry...
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puppettland
hey. this was a great poem and i love it. it's so freaky true. it brings up so many points about life and ourselves. puppettland -
Me-Ow that one is good hehe i loovve it.
#5 puppetland -
Wonderfully evil my friend...Terrific write...Let the madness begin...
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Exceptionally Well Done
Very strong and dark poem. Congratulations on winning the Gold Your imagery was extremely chilling. Thanks for sharing
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fantastic. The story is reflected so well through this. Its amazing and wonderful.
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ok...that's really interesting..i'm kinda confuse..i understand that the poem is about ur name?..vassago?..(is that the name..or does it originate from that?)..but anyway..good piece..personal..but interesting
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I love this poem, it speaks to me in so many ways...I know that anger that I try to hide and act happy. I only let it out in poems..great work, good luck in the contest!
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This poem is original and very very good. I enjoyed it because it was so personal, and it revealed the character before me so well.
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I'm loving this. It's quite cool. Good Luck in the contest. (=
~ Sylvia xxx
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