WAITING
I lift my face to sense the
Wind of your presence
Even here...
Even now on my
Dark speeding path
With rain falling softly
Swept to clear the vision
Tears chilling on my cheeks
All tender things whispered
Remembered, alive at once
Your words flowing to me
Through me still glowing
In the memory of eyes
Of your people touched
Forgive me the times
I was too dead
To hear
Author notes
Option 1. Notice the shape of a fish.
Written November 21st, 2005
What did you think
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Yes all telepathy stems from God first. A delightful and moving write. Jesus saw Nathaniel under the tree with the silver chord that binds us all.
Peace Georgia
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This really touched me on several levels. There are many things that speak to me here. For one, it reminds me of the first sense of passion in youth, and on a deeper level it speaks of the imprints left of those that pass before, and for me it's not the fish I see, it's an arrowhead inverted, very beautiful writing either way.
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My first drafts of this looked very much like an arrowhead.
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Oh Beloved One!
What a wonderfull worded fish ... and one fully and gladly accepted as a gift ... Thank you for leading me here. I loved this ... and the glistening of the all too familiar tears, too.
Love and THANK YOU for remembering my work.
Myra
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hmmm yes i do
thanks for entering
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I am glad that I read the comment you wrote above explaining why this is in the shape of a fish. It made me appreciate the whole thing more. Great Job! I applaud you for entering!
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thanks you very much for this explanation. i can see what you mean now & the relevance of your words.
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Rivage touches on the fish shape. It is a historic pass code for christians to identify each other in dangerous times. One would casually swipe an arc in the dust with a toe, back up, and a christian stranger would provide the second arc to draw the fish. In greek, the name of christ letters placed together made the form of a fish. He also used them as parables; called his disciples fishers of men, broke loaves and fish to provide a miraculous meal, blessed Peter with a bountiful catch at his recruitment. Jesus said his followers would do the same things he did; he could touch deeply with words. And in this moment, I tearfully recall his words through me, touching others.
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the shape of the fish is excellent - yet i'm having trouble relating the text to the shape. fish don't have tears so i can't work out what the words are about. sorry. perhaps you could enlighten me?
best wishes in the contest,
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I like the way you wrote and literally shaped this, you've done a good job. Good luck in the contest and all the best
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this is a great poem....thank you for entering my contest!!!!!
love
writer
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I don't have a trophy bronze come up from you yet... Could you check on it? Thank you so much for the honor!
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Hello,
I actually really like it, I didn’t expect (sorry) but I really did. And yes, I did mention the fish shape although at first I thought maybe a tear would have been more fitting. But then I realised that this is a prayer to god and as a christen the fish symbol is one of the important ones. I truly enjoyed this, thank you for entering
Rivage
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This is a deeply moving prayer. It is a very creative and thoughtful entry to this contest and I thank you for taking the time to enter. I really loved the time and patience
you put into making your poem a fish, a symbol for Jesus 
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'I lift my face to sense the Wind of your presence Even here...Even now on my Dark speeding path With rain falling softly...' This is a lovely & heartfelt penning, filled with a sense of awe & an appreciation for Grace...it is an inspired piece, filled with a sense of Solitude...simplicity in your use of language enhances the impact of imagery & sentiment...well done, deercatcher...Thanks for referring me to this one...
Wanda
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wow, such a sweet read! Short yet beautiful, excellent read
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I like that this takes place outside. I feel closer to God in nature.
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oh yeah and i absolutely loved this line
Forgive me the times
I was too dead
To hear
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impressive use of language. i enjoyed this but i'm afraid it didn't really make me understand how you view the world, though i did get the sense of a 'higher power'. beautiful write and i hope to read more of your work. thank you for entering and good luck.
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sensual
hmmm some how tht shape seems somewhat familiar.. lovely words, very expressive... hows the hunting going?
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