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Office Blockage

 

Come spring,
and coy, amid the landscaped trees,
the red-brick light industrials
peep.

 

In countless low-lying office blocks
the young man's fancy turns
to balance sheets
and busty typists.
Finer feelings stir, perhaps
to smoky chimneys
or to the swallows flying.

He writes no elegies or odes;
the Organisation Man;
and green, and bird, and graceful cantilever
are lost
in technical reports
and management accounts
and inter-office memoranda
of fiendish ingenuity. 

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The rat race ...
An African entry, written in Harare.
Written November 21st, 2005

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  • grannyeri gold member
    March 4, 2006
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    Ah, these poor men who know not of poetry or such other written ecstacies,but slave over facts and figures all day - well stated.


  • Yemassee gold member
    January 16, 2006
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    Quite different from all the other entries in this contest. You point to modern man and what he has lost (not gained.) It is a gebtle satire on corporate life and thanks, I needed the smile.


  • Vickie J
    January 15, 2006
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    It's sad that the workforce demands so much of our attention. Often we don't even know what the weather has done all day because we haven't stepped outside the windowless building. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest!~vj


  • aslanlight
    January 15, 2006
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    Arrggghhh I'd hate to live like this, couldn't bear it at all, you really have got your point across very strongly, well done.
    Now I need to get some fresh air, look at the moon or something


  • chills gold member
    November 22, 2005
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    Ok, I'm sorry about the JB thing - stroke, stroke..... x Hoped you'd effing laugh.....
    Edited on Nov 22, 1:47 p.m. because ''.

  • chills gold member
    November 22, 2005
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    Ok, that's today over, go seize tomorrow. x debs


  • chills gold member
    November 22, 2005
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    I know - bloody cruel that was - BUT IT DID!!!! Hey Carpe diem - I have lots of crazy latin bits of advice - want one a day????? still love ya JB! x debs


  • November 22, 2005
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    another smashing poem both I enjoyed it

  • Philogos gold member
    November 22, 2005
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    I fear that this is the opposite of 'carpe diem' What we have here is sublimation at its worst. Everyone just works until the day is over and it's too late to seize it.
    Edited on Nov 22, 1:51 p.m. because ''.

  • Philogos gold member
    November 22, 2005
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    Betjemen? Betjemen?! How could you?


  • anyonita jenea
    November 22, 2005
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    very haha very unique...pieces of it reminds me of the carpe diem poetry, know what i mean? have happy thanksgivings and whatnot.
    anyonita


  • chills gold member
    November 21, 2005
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    Graphic! I have to own up to having been a busty typist too... there's a lot of us about it seems! Glad you find time for this neatly interleaved between those clever memos... Thought it had a little bit of Betjeman about it. x debs
    Edited on Nov 21, 11:57 p.m. because ''.


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    November 21, 2005
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    Free-verse at its finest.


  • Angel Goddess
    November 21, 2005
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    Certainly a different perspective on the average work day, lol. I'm not sure if I should take offense or not (LOL...just kidding) being a busty ex-typist. Thanks for the laugh. Can't wait to read more of your work. Much love to you and yours,
    Nicole


  • NoWayJo
    November 21, 2005
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    really a very different and unique theme and good poem Philo. really enjoyed this read very much!

    Jo


  • Zaltania
    November 21, 2005
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    LOL this is funny & original. Cool write. I liked it. Good job


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 21, 2005
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    Quite unique how you have written this spin on spring, some very creative images that I certainly never thought of that relate to this topic - like busty typists, for example. Gave me quite a chuckle.


  • StoneLion
    November 21, 2005
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    LOL! This is a great twist on the old cliched idea of what spring should be! Oh my goodness, thank you so much for the laugh. I almost spit chili onto my monitor!

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