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I Let Go

I let go a long time ago
To the dreams that built up
I smashed them on the ground
For all of them had become woe.
All the dreams and all the sorrow
Didn't cease and I doubt they will tomorrow

I let go a long time ago
To the pain and strife
But the pain came back
And the dead dreams were shot down crows.
They can caw and cry
But no matter how much they plead, they will die

I let go a long time ago
Dreams now seem so discouragingly far away
Despair engulfed me
All of this is because of you,
You damned excruciating dismay
Why won't you relinquish for one single day?

I let go a long time ago
I tried to grab back ahold
I slipped and fell
Now I am falling to hell.

- Casey Greene

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Written November 21st, 2005

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  • Midget Of Fury
    November 30, 2005
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    Favorite stanza: The crows. You had a damn good idea and excellent basis, I'd like to see how this would look after another look-over. I'm intrigued
    Best of wishes
    Tiffany

  • Lonely no longer
    November 21, 2005
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    good

    Hey this is pretty good, but i think you could make it ryme a little better. Good imagination, though.