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Lie Awaken

Asleep are my thoughts
        to the sight awaken
      My eyes open to contentment
        Thoughts of nowhere

      The soul that releases
      through the moment of silence
      Sence of lifes` completeness
      soothe through the eyes of emptiness

      See as though begins
      lifes` frist motion
      I lie Awaken
      in the stillness of emotion

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Written November 20th, 2005

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 14, 2008
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    Good poem. Thanks for entering & best of luck

  • bellerophon
    November 23, 2005
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    You have many great lines in the poem. I think though that you don't make your images very clear. It is hard to tell what is happening and the flow is often interupted. Try reading it as someone with no idea of what you think about the poem and imagine how they would understand it. Thanks for entering.