Standing inside a garden, twisting weeds
And thorns surround,
She lingers her broken eyes upon the tree,
Overhanging her and wonders thoughtfully,
Were did it go wrong?
What have i done?
Staying well within the shadows of the oak,
She strokes the marks upon the tree,
So soft and ever gently,
The hearts which caused so much hurt this night,
But joy before,
Compares them to her arm so white,
A replica, haunting swirls and lines,
Look bedazzled, scarlet upon snowflake.
She stares in awe up to the sky,
Tears smashing upon the ground,
'A star for every death' she whispers,
'Well they'll be one more tonight'
The blade glistens in the moonlight,
As the tip touches her throat,
A childlike silouhette dashes past,
Unleashing doubts upon her fragile mind,
But she decides it is a test,
And draws the knife from her pocket once more.
Slicing through her lace-like veins,
Her porcelain figure weeps crimson pain,
She screams, shattering the night.
Falls to her knees and shivers in fright..
'What have i done?'
Dawn breaking,he runs to their meeting place,
'Were is she? What have i done?'
He gasps and backs away,
From her crumpled body, silently gracing the ground,
Then edges towards her, whispering shakily
'But i loved you, but i loved you..'
Kneels beside her beautiful body,
Taking her bloody hand in his,
'Wake up princess, stop fooling me, wake up baby, wake up..'
He collapses in tears upon her chest and notices the symbols,
Carved into her arm which brought about her suicide,
The symbol of their love, now a symbol of her death
He kisses her softly and weeps once more,
Alone with the love he once lost,and now forever gone..
'It wasn't supposed to be this way Princess,
I never meant to hurt you.
You were never meant to die.
I love you so much..
..My Serenity'
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Written November 20th, 2005
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wow this is rele gd well done ... soz i cant type more i hurt my hand
josh -
Wow. I am simply in awe of this piece. You have painted a beautifully chilling picture with your carefully chosen words. I love the unexpected descriptions of objects, like the "tears smashing upon the ground". A truly outstanding write.
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AWESOME!!!
WOW!!! Just.....utter and complete WOW!!!! I am speechless!!! I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem!!! It rocks!!! I think you did a WONDERFUL job with the imagery and it flowed very nicely!! I LOVED the story it told!! I would change nothing!! GREAT JOB!!! *applauds*
Lisa
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oh man. this...wow. it gave me shivers! i love:
Taking her bloody hand in his,
'Wake up princess, stop fooling me, wake up baby, wake up..'
that REALLY made me shiver! lol this is hauntingly brillaint and im so glad i read it...i also love the last stanza. awesome work hun!
love hugs and kisses
polly xxxxx -
wow. i'm the first comment yay! man.... i really really like this alot, especially the last verse. great job, keep up the awesome work.
love autumn
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