A special gift
just a picture of her
she'll give him for the holidays.
Not found in stores
framed with her heart
from happy times together over the years.
What to wrap her simple gift with?
This, too, will not be found in stores...
Shreds of his life she had collected
now patched together, old and new
tied with a ribbon, and a little tag
simply saying, From: Me To: You.
He receives it and hides his emotions
but he is touched. How did she see?
The way he held it, and did not open it
the way he looked from it to she.
Her dad's not one to shed a tear
neither joy or sadness will he weep.
But she could see it made him happy
and she could sense it touched him deep.
He would not open it that Christmas Day
he said her wrapping was far too dear
to tear it apart would cause him pain
like losing the happier times they shared.
He opened it finally on New Year's Eve
removed it from his laurel wreath
she saw the first ever tear from his eye
as he held her picture underneath.
Author notes
Contest Notes: Option 6- A Special Gift Not Found in Stores
Based on something my daughter did for her older brother away at college- same results...
Written November 19th, 2005
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A contest entry
- Happy Holidays (Contest) by Mrs. Dumas.
300 points, ended December 29, 2005, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is a very moving poem. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Jim -
Thanks, Heaven, may your heart touch others this Holiday Season!
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Wanye, this is so touching. I did this once for my daughter bringing the same results. It's so great when something that we think is so simple brings others such joy. I think if people got back to basics like this there would be alot of tears shed, well unless you are one of those spoiled rich kids LOL
Very nice sentiments here and it flowed so well. Best of Luck in the contest. Be Well and Be Blessed
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thanks, suseann, oh Grand Aunt!
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And these are the things you'll remember all your life as the sweetest moments.Much like the first time you look at your toddler who made a picture worthy of refrigerator art.These stick in the mind forever.Beautiful! An open heart scribe Poet!~~~Suseann
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This is really beautiful... I was really moved by your words. Expensive presents is not it that gives happiness, but the simple things from the heart. This is actually Christmas for me, to show other people love and affection and asking nothing in return. Great poem Wayne. Good luck in the Contest. Anna.
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a kiss for every tear. my spirit in the night! and may you touch a heart this holiday season, and not devour it! lol
your partner in the afterlife
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Beautiful
OMG, that is SO beautiful. I love this and damn it you made me cry. You did an amazign job on this piece.
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Ohhh this almost made me cry..reminded me of when my brother first went away to the marines, he could not call and we could not call him, it was during Christmas and I sent him a recordalbe card with our voice on it..Great poem..~Angela
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Yes, the I to 'she' for a couple of reasons, oh sis who has a theme song now!
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This is so sweet bro. I was surprised to see your author's comments, only because you changed the characters. This is truly a beautiful write. What sweet children you must have that would do something like this for eachother. Beautiful!
~Lyrical
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thanks for the comment, Shell, glad you enjoyed my tear-jerking holiday piece!
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Thanks for the suggestion, Smurfed... yes, I'm working on the flow of the first part so it works, so I don't have to have a big, boring 4-line stanza piece! lol
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Yes! Mistake... hmmm... sounds like you've identified a problem... which is the first step toward overcoming it! (you'll only get that from a hopeless optomist like me!)
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thank you, Val, glad you enjoyed my tear-jerking holiday piece! May you also touch hearts this holiday season!
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thanks, Az, now suck up those tears! lol
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Thanks for the comment, memnoch... hmmm... sad and tragic... maybe I'll try that next! Kind of like Shakespeare's Titus Andronicus where everyone is dead by the end of the play!
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aaaw, that's soo nice! i really loved this, even though i usually look for pain and misery in poems to enjoy them! hehe, kind of twisted, i kept looking for the bad part (oh, the dad dies before opening it!) but nothing happened, and i still loved it! great write...
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awwwwwwww this is a tear-jerker poem and i dont care what anyone else thinks about my opinion.
The flow to this was such that anyone with a feeble brain could clearly visualize the image and feel the emotions felt as she was making the present and the anticipation of unwrapping it on new year's
Rae -
What an exceptionally written peice. It brought tears to my eyes just to read it. A gift such as this is irreplacable and can only be held within the heart of the one giving it and the one receiving it. Great Job on this emotional peice and good luck in the contest. You deserve this win! ~val~
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that is so sweet. i feel like i'm going to cry now. i once gave my picture to my mom for christmas and she said it was the best thing she ever got. sometimes its the pieces of us that mean the most to someone. great write and keep up the great work
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Very sweet, but the flow would've been nicer if you would have done the 4-line stanza thing all the way through. Awesome poem though, once again, very sweet.
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mearachd means mistake.... you asked me right?
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Awesome job,touching loved the emotions and the bond between father and daughter,so sweet
Her dad's not one to shed a tear
neither joy or sadness will he weep.
But she could see it made him happy
and she could sense it touched him deep -
thanks, oblivious, 'beautiful and touching', my family will never believe I wrote something like that! lol
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so beautiful n touching.......really liked it!
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wow....good job. You really have a talent, and it sure shows in this. A real tear jerker! My favorite line is
Shreds of his life she had collected
now patched together, old and new
tied with a ribbon, and a little tag
simply saying, From: Me To: You.
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I think I'm going to cry. ;__; I loved it, the poem was touching and.... oh I think I'm going to cry. hehe. May you have a wonderful holiday this year.
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Here's a tissue for your tears, Jess may you also touch many hearts in the coming holiday season...
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OK, I'll laugh, my sweet sis, then gently dry your tears... remember to wrap a bow around yourself since you're the Christmas Present!
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thanks, my bright angel!
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thanks, Cheryl, glad it brought back a happy memory!
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Wayne, you always amaze me and with this, you've brought tears to my eyes. I have done the same thing for my brother, father, gramma, uncles and aunts and so many more and the look on their faces is so much more than anything else. Thank you for entering this piece; it's very well written and such an enjoyable piece to read. Thanks for entering, again, and best of luck in the contest.
Hugs
Jess -
Oh laugh but I am in tears here. I got some bad news recently about my Father's health and ironically enough New Year's is his birthday.. I only want to send myself home for his Christmas Present and am working on that now.. Beautiful, and Thank You for touching my heart,
Whisper
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There is no better gift to give another than one straight from the heart that cannot be found in any stores. They are the most priceless and most dear. It shows one truly made the effort to make a gift something so very special. A gift as such can do nothing but bring tears to the eys as they show you have opened your heart to find the perfect gift. A wonderfully touching piece you have penned my dear friend.
Blessings
Bel -
WOW... This is a beautiful poem AP Dad!!! YOu did a great job on this!!! I really like it!!! Good luck in the contest!!!
Hugs,
Beth -
awwww this is wonderful dear Brother what a really touching and wonderful write, i love the way you have captured that moment in words:
Shreds of his life she had collected
now patched together, old and new
tied with a ribbon, and a little tag
simply saying, From: Me To: You.
it is touching to do this i did something simular with my dad for his 50th birthday with my daughter he had tears in his eyes! well done a really wonderful write and best of luck in the contest i hope this one is a winner for you Cheryl xx
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to be able to touch someone in such a way does make it all worth while...this one tugs
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thanks, Wanda
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'...Finally, then on New Year's Eve his took it from his laurel wreath I saw the first tears ever from his eyes as he looked at my picture underneath...' This is beautifully done, Wayne...My late Sweetheart once took some news clippings about his father's work & matted them & put them in a bullseye oval frame that he'd redone himself...His father was so touched by the gesture, I saw his tears...well done, Poet...Good luck in the contest... Wanda
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