it's been overlooked
buried, forgotten
beneath scrolls and codices
relegated to the bottom
of the religious rhetoric
stop searching for the secret mystery
give up on the exclusive message
EVERYONE is a child of the I AM
Thou shalt coexist
Author notes
Every letter has a symbol that represents a system of thought: The crescent and star for Islam; the pentagram for Wicca; the relativity formula for science; the star of David for Judaism; the Karma Wheel dotting the i for Buddhism; the Tao symbol for Taoism; the cross for Chrisitianity.
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Written November 19th, 2005
A contest entry
- Write An Eleventh Commandment by Sandygram.
300 points, ended December 1, 2005, 12 entries
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An interesting piece...
An interesting piece; we are all certainly a child of the Almighty, for in His Word it is written that we are made in His Image and that Christ died to reconcile us to Jehovah; nicely written. --Joe
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ah if only! it would be nice if that was indeed the eleventh comandment. It might solve many of the problems in the world today. Or it might not. It all depends on interpretation.
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nice short and to the point wouldn't it be nice
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After reading some of the other posted in this contest, I was moved more by yours. It is not flowery, nor poetic; it is truth. And, although covered in other places, this is not covered by the original ten commandments. I feel that it would make a worthy addition. This should have placed, somewhere. It is a disappointment it did not.
Thank you for sharing.
rous
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Powerful...
Very powerful message in your words...this truly is a great "commandment". The symbols made it stand out well, and when you wrote "EVERYONE is a child of the I AM", well, that just put the icing on the cake. I applaud you in your work...very brilliant and passionate i presume. I could not have done this better myself ^_^. God bless you.
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excellent this awesome this is cool write i really liked it very much. Really interesting poem with beautiful lines nice tone and beautiful flow'
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Excellent piece, I can find no fault. I hope this piece gets the consideration it deserves. Far too many spiritual and religious writes center around the I'm right, you're wrong mentality, Applause for you. And I might even buy the bumper sticker.
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You've used the symbols very well.A good poem.Wish you luck.
Shahrzad
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an amazingly stated observation of the obvious, i am sitting here wondering, 'now why didn't I write this,' but you have written it better than i could have ever done. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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Excellent! I cant't think of a better 11th Commandment. ~ Sue
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Yes – and all three religions came from the same source – Abraham
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definately says something about our culture doesn't it!
Despite that, I think the theology in it is interesting. Judiasm is central to both Islam and Christianity - take a look at where they are placed. The beginning, middle and end of this word are three of the faith groups who need to understand that message most.
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I see that all the symbols are worth $2.99 as a bumper-sticker. . . . that says something already.
- I might enter the contest, but it seems to be the Eleventh Commandment should be respect the above Albert
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