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~ Back In the Sky

Now that the stars are back in the sky
And the silence no more makes you cry
The sleepy little boat is sailing in winter stream
Taking you across a midsummer nights dream
Tell me do you still think about the conversation
Unknown in the middle of the constellation
And do you still walk across the crazy dance floor
Alone towards the exit door...

Now that your old 88' radio sings
Westlife guys song "flying without wings"
And listening to FM 89 in the nights gloom
You fall sleep in that old couch in the drawing room
Tell me do you feel cold as the fog covers your window
You search for something you will never know
And you feel like you no more belong here
Memories linger everywhere…

Now that the candles light your computer table
And you watch your TV with that worn Sony label
Your cell phone is set on the Copacabana tone
That you liked so much in the past now gone
So, tell me do you still think about the conversation
Unknown in the middle of the constellation
And did you walk across the crazy dance floor
Alone towards the exit door...

Now that your famous sound system looks so old
And you still wear that ring made of gold
On expensive wrought iron furniture dust and memories grow
Forsaken are the grand piano and guitar you loved so
So, tell me do you still think about the conversation
Unknown in the middle of the constellation
And don't you miss me on the dance floor
While you walk alone towards the exit door...?

Tell me, are you thinking about the conversation
Unknown in the middle of this constellation
And are you not missing me on the dance floor
Now that you are walking towards the exit door..?

 

 

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Author notes

Written November 19th, 2005

Inspired by song Drops of Jupiter by Train.

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  • inder silver member
    July 4
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    nice

    you certainly have a way with rhymes! keep up the good work


  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Nice lyrical flow sweet soul, you know how to capture the wind when it blows, and this is so beautifully inscribed my friend, and how I love your art work so.

    Peace and love, Timothy


  • forever changed
    August 9, 2008

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    wow

    Ah wow...this is fantastic,love it from start to finish,just is beautifully written,well done xxoxox

  • tmullins
    December 16, 2005
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    this is great. I like the way you cover all the aspects of the loss of love, the piano and guitar, the radio songs, the cell phone tune, great job here. I am missing you on the dance floor as I am walking to the exit door..... tracy


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    November 20, 2005
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    While I think you should've taken the time to label each part of the song (verse 1, chorus, verse 2, etc.) as it took me a while to separate the refrain from other parts, I do think this is a well-written song, fully emotive and beautiful. A personal tone is taken to this; it can be the hardest thing to 'generalize' personal experiences to everyone in the crowd, especially when a song is being performed. Here, it's not an issue. The words all seem to flow so well. I hope to hear it one day on the radio.



    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora ("Mama")


  • Quabben
    November 19, 2005
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    excellent

    Well written Kiddo you seem to have covered a lifetime in these words and I loved how you concluded this work.

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