Light of life shinning brightly
Eyes sparkling, smile on lips
Feeling the heat on my skin
Living life to the fullest
Within a split second of time
The sun is destroyed and shattered.
Life becomes meaningless
Hopes and dreams lost forever
Starring through the glass
At the other side of life
Wishing I wasn't there
Hoping that it wasn't him
Looking at the crushed metal
World spinning and going black
Knowing that it was him...
Wanting to know it wasn't him
To the ordinary passerby
Just another accident...
But to me... he was...
My friend, my father...
Tears of sadness trickling down
Anger, pain, sorrow, regret
Wanting to say that last good-bye
Never seeing him again....
Author notes
In Memory of Ian Graham, my father and friend.
RIP Ian Graham - Died July 14, 2000. The man who meant everything to me and never knew how much he meant. The man who changed my life and never knew.
This entire thing happened in about 10 seconds. I was driving with my aunt and I saw the motorcycle. I saw how torn up it was. I saw the red truck that hit him that barely had a scratch in it. I saw it, but I didn't find out till later that it was him.
Written November 19th, 2005
In a list
What did you think
Comments
1 - 28 of 28
-
I never lost anyone in an accident thak God, but I did lose a brother who was barely 8 months old.I had prayed so much for a brother, and when he came, I lost him, without even telling him what his birth meant to me,what I would love us to do together, as brothers...
I know what its like to lose someone you love so deeply.
I did write a poem though, but never had the courage to post it.
Thank you for sharing this with me.. You are not alone.
-
I'm sorry, Babe. I don't know what it's like to lose someone in an accident. The only people I lost were from old age or, in Grandpa Ragan's case, cancer.
I know that can't take away the pain that probably still haunts you, buthopefully it's enough to help. 
-
This was beautiful... I'm so sorry about ur loss... my, tears just came to my eyes. Good write! God bless(f)
-
OMG, talk about bringing tears to my heart. This was so, sooooooooooooo...etc, good.
You really know how to put your emotions down on paper. -
Thank you very much for your encouraging comment
I appreciate it a lot
--Tim -
You really make it easy to connect emotionally with the words. There's no hiding YOUR talent.
Bravo. -
Thanks for your comment, Jennifer
--Tim -
Wow. That is so awful. I am so sorry. Great poem.
-
hey tim I no it happened like 6 years ago,but I'm sure it still hurts to think about it.
Nice poem, good rythem. I 'll be praying for you.
-
Very sad write. I know it had to be so hard on you to go through this. My uncle who was like my father died in a car wreck also and I don't think I could have dealt with having to actually see the wreck like you have had to do. Good job and good luck in this contest!
-
Thank you for reading my poem again Good luck with judging your contest.
--Tim -
thank you for entering this in my contest..I have commented on this piece before..again my condolences..and how sad this piece is to ride by and see an accident ,only to find out later it is your loved one..I'm trulely so sorry!!this had to be so difficult to write..hugs honeydew
-
I know what a tremendious loss you have faced with you Father, my condlences. You've been able to share his memory with us and I thank you!
-
This was very sad. Thank you for entering.
-
This is a beautiful sad write..my heart goes out to you for your loss..I lost my husband recently and I see my children cry and suffer greatly , they miss him so much...as I do..I pray in time your heart will heal..just know you will see him again one day in Heaven..hugs Honeydew
-
Wow... goodness.. a few of your poems are very good at bringing tears to my eyes -lol- This is great! Its so filled with emotion! Just what I was looking for... Good luck in the contest!
Lots of Love*
RLL -
wow... can really feel the heat of the moment... the speed... dude that would hav really killed me... one true friend during pain torn away... to leave the blood to gush from the wound...
well remember if u ever wanta hav a heart to heart convo im here!! ^^
mushy -
This is a wonderful poem. I like it no matter what. I hope you keep up this great writing. I'll be checking back in on your work.
-
Thank you for your wonderful comment. He died 5 years ago, but I'm still feeling the pain. This is one of the first poems I've been able to write about it... just being able to release the pain. Rather than writing one of the typical "Oh! I miss him!" like that... I decided to try and make it more metaphorical, which I'm glad you caught onto that. Thanks again for reading.
--Tim -
Hmm.. quite a harsh comment (previous) that surprised me, especially since the subject of your poem is so personal. I think it was a very honest poem - the repetition of hoping that it wasn't him and thinking it might be him and so on struck a cord with me. I think the contrast of life before and after is effective and I liked the metaphor of looking through the glass. I'm really sorry for your loss!!
-
You did fit the criteria for the contest but also messed up on one of the finer points in writting poetry. Words like "Anger, pain, sorrow", and "regret" are very abstract. In some ways it is like describing to a blind perso what a truck looks like and saying it is red. The reader is blind to you emotions. Most people have never driven by there dead friend the emotions are too powerful for the average reader to even imagine when you just tell them about it. I think a stronger poem would be if you described everything your friend was to you who he was as you drive by the wreck. We can more easily appreciate the sorrow if first we underatand the value of the man.
You were right on calling me out at first though. I did read your poem too fast and didn't give it the time it deserved. You did do several good things in with this poem that I should have mentioned earlier. The quick switch from the happy life to one of sorrow is good. Also using a real event from your life helps to make the emotions in the poem real, which is important. Thanks again for entering and I hope you are starting to understand what I am saying. -
I am sorry I may have judged this poem too fast. I apologize but I still think you tell me to much about what you felt instead of making me feel it which was the point of this contest.
-
What do you mean not being able to picture it? Let me explain it. Let's start in the first stanza. It's a sunny day... everything's normal. Got that? Maybe I don't just come right out and say: Okay, here's what happened. That's not what poetry is about. Poetry is about using metaphors and poetic terms to create a picture in the reader's mind. If you don't see this as creating imagery, then you don't know how to read poetry (no offense). Second stanza I describe feelings, yes, of how I felt when I saw the incident. In the 3rd stanza I describe looking through the glass... more feelings, but that's what I was going. 4th stanza I describe the crushed metal of his motorcycle... again, more imagery. 5th stanza again is feelings, indeed, but it's also describing how normal it looked to other people, but it was different to me. If you can't imagine this and read inbetween the lines, that's fine. Oh well. Your loss.
--Tim -
I don't think this really meets the requirements for the contest. It may be about a single moment in time but you do not really paint me a picture of the instant but just tell me what you felt then. Thanks for entering though.
-
Awww its so sad it really shows your true feelings.I really admire the way you write.You will be the first person i go to if I ever need any help on anything or i find myself stuck.I love this poem its awsome.
-
Very sad and touching. Beautiful poem..
-
Thanks so much for your wonderful comment. This is the first thing I've ever written about that day.... Thanks for reading it and I'm glad you enjoyed read it.
--Tim -
Ohh, tim
this is so sad... i don't know how to describe it... just the way it goes from such beauty and happiness in the first stanza, and in the second one i can feel the... shock? stunned-ness...? and then the... i don't know what you would call it... suspense, maybe... of the rest of the poem, to the heartbreak of the last part. it progresses well, even if it's really sad. it's beautiful, it really is. i'm incredibly sorry that someone so important to you passed away so what if it was five years ago... i can't imagine having such fear, not knowing if someone so important to you is dead or alive. this is excellent. it's really a beautiful write. God bless you
Adding your comment:
1 - 28 of 28
