in her i saw it coming,
the cuts and bruises
self inflicted and make-up too.
in her i saw it dying,
the blood from her wounds
she cried loud and vanished
in her i saw it reborn
her torn jacket and open flesh
hidden was her love
in her i saw myself,
longing for the better
but no way to find it.
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Written November 18th, 2005
A contest entry
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580 points, ended December 6, 2005, 14 entries
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This is really well written. As said above I like the "In her i saw" bits, very interesting and original, I truly enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing and entering, best of luck.
♥
~Lana
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thanks dude
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A good poem, d-amour. I can see deep, sad feelings in your words. I liked your repetition in her i saw. Very nice. You may put in some more punctuation, and capitalize atleast the I's...
You get my applause for this one. Good luck on the contest! 
Jim
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