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What Have You Done To Me?


It's been so long
It's happening again
I made myself a vow
Never again to love
That's a pain
I can no longer handle
Why me? Why now?
You weaved a web
Overpowered me
Ensnared my heart
Holding it tight
To weak to fight
You cast a spell
Hypnotized me
It's beyond my control
Lost in the midst
Of an age old
Loosing battle
I wanna hide
I wanna fight
My hands are tied
My heart is exposed

MY GOD!
What have you done to me?

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Written November 18th, 2005

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  • Blood Wedding
    June 15, 2006
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    wow. that was amazing. so much emotion felt. a gradual crescendo leaving the reader gasping for air after the last line. well, me at least. great piece, absolutely amazing.


  • victoria Secret
    June 3, 2006
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    Verrry interesting piece. I don't know how you do it, but you do. shortening your words to make a master-piece. It's quite charming. Thanks for sharing your talent. Take care now

    victoria

  • deepest feelings
    March 28, 2006
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    hey jst tell me hw do u do suach a great job with each & every write of yours jsut hope i can do the great job u do tell u wat u r my inspiration thank u tc with all my love


  • Soul-2-Soul
    November 18, 2005
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    crying? why would you be crying sweet bel?...

    again you capture ones heart for longing and to be loved. You'll find what you're looking for, your heart is to big to be denied, you are one of the sweetest and most caring people i have encountered and not only do you show it, but it comes across most brilliantly in your poems.


  • Celticmoon
    November 18, 2005
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    Just have alot bubbling up now and it seems to be over flowing beyond control. So I sit here and either write or cry. And since I have done enough crying this evening I thought I would try writing.

    Thanks you for comment my dear.

    Always appreciated.


  • tlsledge
    November 18, 2005
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    "I made myself a vow
    Never again to love" It's a vow we have all made at one time or another. You wrote it very well, though. eep writing.


  • wbiro gold member
    November 18, 2005
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    a very strong write for 3am, Bel! Yes, the heart has a mind of its own that we cannot control, and you've depicted it well here...


  • fattestmatt
    November 18, 2005
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    Whoa, the end of this one caught me a bit off guard, a gradual build-up of frustration and then BAM! I've never felt what it's like to be torn apart by a love gone wrong, but I have a pretty good idea after reading this poem. Keep it up!

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