What is not, is Real
Deep in the mind
In the depths of hollowed thoughts
In a world of fabricated reality
I see what is not
And what is not
Is real
A world smooth and sleek
Gems of beauty and wonder
Marble dreams
Filled in colorful stones of such vibrant majesty
Glinting in the sun
A world where the grass is red
The sky so golden
No hint of blue
As if the touch of sun had broadened
To share its golden light with the endless sky
And yet I stand and ponder
What world is real
Are the pieces of yesterday not so concrete
That my paper dreams can cut through their questioned existence
And still be the brittle image within my head
The questions plague
As I watch this surreal world ever change
From the golden skies
To an autumnal haze
Painted with countless clouds in shades of orange
And still the greatest beauty remains unknown
Unseen until the sun withers
And the twilight of emeralds and diamonds sweep across the sky
Twinkling ever so gently
On a canvas of a cool mosaic
Blended in sapphire and violet
This world so peacefully kept
My fabricated home
So true to be
Mine dream is mine reality
In depths of the human mind, I dwell
To live and reside
As a man of dreams
Author notes
Many wonder what is "true reality", the physical world or dreams. This is one end of the spectrum, what do you think?
Option #2, Phrases
Written November 17th, 2005
A contest entry
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Very nicely done. And you have a great perception and aptitude for descriptive imagery! Thank you for sharing and good luck!
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Hmmm, this is very interesting to think about. This seemed a little abstract, which makes it nice. I enjoyed this, it's different. I also like the background too.
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Beautifully descriptive
Beautiful description here. I like how your imagination works.
This piece flowed brilliantly and your poem had a graceful presence (<<<Sorry that word souns random, but that's the only word I could think of to describe it).
"And yet I stand and ponder
What world is real
Are the pieces of yesterday not so concrete
That my paper dreams can cut through their questioned existence
And still be the brittle image within my head".
...My favourite verse, though I cant really describe why.
You did an excellent job writing this and I'd like to thank you for entering my contest.
I wish you good luck, and hope that you stay safe.
Take care.
Lauz. xXx.
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Wow wow wow! This is a truly amazing write! The imagery is beautiful and no words can describe! Your free verse is fantastic and I loved every moment of reading this. You have such amazing talent!
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penned masterfully
Mere words of praise can not do this piece ANY justice whatsoever. Tears began to well up in my eyes as i saw the the "color images" play across my minds eye. VERY BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN! I stand as before;your talent is brilliant! -
this was great, a journey to an entirely new place..and you suck the reader in immediately with the first two lines, I can't say anything really that can tell you how wondeerful i think this piece is. You have a great talent.
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Kind of reminds me of Kerouac.. I dunno why. But WOW! I am BLOWN AWAY! Such beauty and depth in this. Genuine wonders that at times may conquer someones mind. I like how you took on this concept of Reality. I love this poem. Brilliant. Thanks. Good luck in the contest!!
Keep on keepin' on
lindsay -
Deep. Questioning what I, at least, have questioned on many occasions. I, too, love the lines using the given phrases, I think you worked them in beautifully!
Good luck in the contest!
Bestest of wishes
~Meli~ -
I really like this poem, like, a lot. It's really really deep and I can relate with a great deal of it....Very amazing!
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interesting.. I've always wondered about that, whether what we know is real or not, and whether what we dream is more real than what we think we live.. we wouldn't know, would we? A nice thought sometimes.
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Wow. Huh, WOW! I'm impressed. No, I'm beyond impressed, I'm amazed, blown away. Moved.
This was an amazing piece. You very definitely took me there, and made it so I didn't want to leave.
Your use of the phrases I gave was perfect.
"Are the pieces of yesterday not so concrete
That my paper dreams can cut through their questioned existence"
That was my favorite part, I think. Thanks for entering my contest! It was a pleasure to read your work.
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