I am typing on a terminal and
Sense the clean air of electricity.
Static
The words come out
Through my fingers'
Movement
And science fiction
Becomes science fact.
Nothing
about what the screen displays
is virtual
And what is seen
should be deleted.
Enter
My words are a virus
that are so human
All monitors
transmit a brief message of humanity:
"Erasing All Artificial Data."
All black out
Blinking
white
dot.
Author notes
This piece addresses the contrast between humanity and the limitations of technology. Essentially intimacy versus sterility. In the end, the poem shows how technology might see 'humanity' as 'artificial data.' And, what we're left with is the computer dieing and the human watching.
Written November 16th, 2005
A contest entry
- Electronic Passion?!? by Gleto Orica.
1000 points, ended December 1, 2005, 16 entries
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Well Yvon! This is an odd one. I like to think I'm fairly bright, but I wouldn't have gotten this one had I not read you author's comments!
Anyway, this is an intersting piece. I got the feeling that you look at technology as a powerful tool that could rip us all to pieces if it "wanted" to. I hope that never happens! I like my toys! 
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Fun theme - it seems weird to me that this culture isn't more obsessed with sci fi, as we're living it daily. It took me an English class in it to think, hey, I should consider cyborgs more often. And love the title, reminding me of another survey class in critical theory (best university English class for me, sadly taken in 4th year), which traces how humans align themselves against animals (initally considered machinelike, especially by Aristotle), and slowly more toward animals and away from machines (like Schiller). Okay, I'm a geek, but that made my day and I'm glad people on here are thinking about these kinds of things.
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Wow. That has a wonderful look on computer frustratioN! Lol. I hate it everytime my computer dies on me...especially during something deep or intense! But I love the imagry and the word usage! Great job, and good luck!
Tawni -
Fascinating! Great work. I find it is hard to write tech or computer poetry well and you have done a very good job with it, so kudos to you! Good luck in the contest!
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I've watched my computer die many temporary deaths...and a few of them I've had probably have been reincarnated too!
seriously though, a really interesting poem and works well with this contest theme. Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
P.S.: looks like we're contest neighbors here! all I have to do is click NEXT! never hurts to know what you're neighbors are up to, you know? LOL
Edited on Nov 16, 11:42 because ''.
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