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gone


and all is dead around me now
 the calmness of the night keeps me awake
as I lie here

thinking

of all that could have been

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Written November 14th, 2005

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  • emochild
    November 17, 2005
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    ah, very mystical.
    you incorporate imagery without words! ah! CRAZY!

    I hate wondering about what COULD have happened. because you always talk yourself into thinking everything could've been better.. if only you had done one little thing differently.
    The way I look at it is, if you go back and change one aspect of your life, everything that happened from then until the present could end up changing drastically. I believe there was a movie or two about this kind of thing.
    Ah, butterfly effect. Remember how he was just like "ah, I could have been with that girl if only I had done this!" and he goes back and changes it? And with every aspect he "corrects," the outcome only gets worse.
    I agree with that. That's why that movie rocked amazingly. plus, ashton kutcher, of course.
    Anyway, good job, this pieces induces lots of thought (as if you couldn't tell from my rambling) and that is what a poem is meant to do. Hurrah!
    <3 love you!
    -Jen