There is a place that I have known
Its called the "House of Dreams"
And I have cried so many tears
Alone, again, it seems
Yeah people ...we're lost children
Just Hearts without a home
So many down...abandoned ..
Of a life that we all do roam
Her mummy was a prostitute
A lady of the night
A needle came and took a life
And now she's on her own
She lived a life upon the street
And strangers she would meet
There is no hope for such life
A princess of the street.
Now I've come back to where I've been
Workin nightmares into dreams
But still the dark, is all around
And people are not what they seem
They smile and kill without a will
And take you poor soul down
For all the goodness in this world
Its no wonder I wear a frown.
People taking everything
And leaving nothing behind
So many starving children
But all who see are blind
So if you hear this song of mine
Please don't go the way of all
Learn to love and tolerate
Dont heed the Pipers call
Now things are so bad
And this worlds gone mad
Everything lost control
In darkest dens we hide of sins
and Damsels ply their trades
Theres life and Death that final breath
The river calls its many streams
Dont pay that ferrymans call
the greatest thing that we could do
Is nothing more at all
Author notes
Written November 14th, 2005
A contest entry
- subjects :) by Ami.
525 points, ended April 9, 19 entries
Honorable mention
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I like it
my favorite lines were...
"People taking everything
And leaving nothing behind
So many starving children
But all who see are blind"
Great Write and
Thank You for entering
Good Luck
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This is a really good poem. Good flow, and deep meaning. I really love the emotion, that comes through in each and every line --- though it isn't the best of emotion. Pure, however.
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Theres only two word that comes to mind. Wonderful, and amazzzzzing. This is stroung! You really have an act for poetry. Your an Amaaazzzzzzzzzzing poet must I say. Bravo!
~Xoxo
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BRAVO! BRAVO!
Lovely, lovely dark rich write!
YOu did "ply" the dark to Shine the light
wise wise words in your poem!
and may I personally add...
a great light now beams upon the land,
and those of the dark
are clearly exposed...hoping we
do not see, and react with the
typical..."so what"
but now that so many are affected
personally by these deeds...
finally we are standing up and
screaming loudly world-wide
for justice,
liberty and blessed accountability.
I loved your poem and Dylan would be proud!
ears/Seattle
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excellent
great take on Dylan, enjoyed the write thanks for sharing
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wonderful!
I really enjoyed this poem and my apologies for not commenting sooner on some. Computer issues..lol I love the flow and the content, how it tells a story and offers a outlook for those traveling the wrong road. Looking now to read more of your posts! Very good poem! And best wishes in the contest!!!! -
this was really heartwarming, from a dismal start with woes and troubles to the hopeful end which lets one know there is a different route if we want to take it. I dont see it as bieng a copy of a Dylan piece rather a poem inspired by him, I haven't read the contest rules but this is wonderful, well done
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The rhyme and flow sort of reminds me of House of the Rising Sun (which was not his song but I did a great job with it). The start is very good, but the end kind of gives an optimism that is not found in his work. He was very objective in his writing, so many could percieve different messages within but it really held nothing but perspective. I really like your poem. Thank you for entering. Daoine
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