The cool mist upon the river so eerie in wintertime
Sets her breath gliding swoosh upon the bridge lime,
Moreover, she passes the iron gates passageway climb.
To the crisp air faded behind the clouds humus rain,
There crept upon the madness’ edge a whisper voice
Comes from the light of day awakening by choice,
To hear the ripples burst a catfish dance so rejoiced
Sung to the black bird perched on the bridge mundane,
To his surroundings settled in the cold brisk air
Await the morning mist coming from the river’s flair,
So content to the earth’s willow branch hung so low stare
There is no other picturesque grey matter so settling cold,
Perched on the river’s edge flowing in a humus dance.
Moreover, as if nature painted her in wintertime at first glance
Brushed to the bank crept a voice to the iron mast a Gothic romance
Novel between ships passing under the iron, bridge suddenly withhold.
Author notes
Ochtfochlach form- Ochtfochlach:eight lines of any number of syllables, AAABCCCB. (those letters simply mean lines 1, 2, and 3 rhyme, lines 4 and 8 rhyme, and 5, 6, and 7 rhyme.)
Layout:
Line 1: A
Line 2: A
Line 3: A
Line 4: B
Line 5: C
Line 6: C
Line 7: C
Line 8: B
Written November 13th, 2005
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A contest entry
- ~*~House of Options~*~ by Aimee the Great.
500 points, ended December 13, 2005, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for your comments and liking my poem. Haley27
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i like the rythim and flow of this poem. the beat sorta sets the mood. good write and good imagery
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Thank you for your gracious comments towards my poem. Haley27
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I like the double stanza. There have been two other of that stylae that just used one stanza. This form is very interesting. Thanks for entering!!
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Thank you, this was my first time doing one I hope this fit the contest. Haley27
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i feel as if im being told a srory and the images instantly pop in my head as the story was being told. i loved how you wasnt afraid to do a second stanza to round off this write
Rae
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