While living in a desperate line of fire,
And playing games of hit and run once more
I can not find the courage to inspire
The flame you made to flicker, and explore.
Through walls of wit you've stolen from my eyes,
And careful words you whisper in my ear
The sunset where we say our sweet goodbyes
Knows someday soon my heart will hold you near.
The times we saw each other in white light
Feel memories of sweet tears and harsh regret,
And in them I still strive to reach new heights
Without the painful times you won't forget.
So here I stand, uncovered and undone
Through wars and scraps of fights I wish we'd won.
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..for school!!
Written November 13th, 2005
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First Of All Let Me Start Off By Telling You How Wonderful This Is:
1. The Rhyming Is BRILLIANT!!!
2. I Love The Stroy It Tells.
3. The Meaning Is Priceless!!!!!
4. You Spilled Emotion On Here Wonderfully!!!
Ok Now Let Me Tell You What To Do!:
1. Never Stop Writing! *you're awesome!*
2. Keep It Going!
3. Keep It Up!
4. KEEP IT STRONG!!!
I LOVE THIS POEM SOOO MUCH!!! -Rachel -
Wow. Loved it. How, how do you rhyme so perfectly? What's your secret? I'm so glad I clicked this, but I have to admit, the only reason I did was because the title was the same as a song by blink 182 that I lurve
For shame. But anyway, brill write, hopefully I'll read some more of your work soon,
Love Laura <333 -
aweoms job!!
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I like this. It has a very nice flow. Great job. I hope that you will continue writing and have a wonderful day. -
Very moving piece you have written there. I believe your first paragraph to be the more "reaching" for the audience, as you throw the paint on the wall. Nice write.
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