A boy that I once knew
Had a bright future ahead
He could have gone far
But he killed himself instead
He was actually quite happy
But his father was very repressed
The boy didn't realize it but
His father was deeply depressed
One night the father called the boy
And asked him how to tie a certain knot
The boy was sorta confused
But showed him without a second thought
The next morning the boy awoke to silence
And he went in search for his father
He walked into the living room
To see his father hanging from a rafter
The rope that suspended him
And ultimately ended his life
Was the same knot the boy had shown him
Just the previous night
A boy was racked with guilt and grief
For the rest of his short life
Because he thought he had killed his father
That depressing and fateful night
So the boy could not take it anymore
And he hung himself too.
There is a lesson here
Suicide affects more people than just you...
Author notes
This is unfortunately based on a true story... My mother really knew this kid... The kid didn't commit suicide, but I just wanted to get the message out there that suicide doesn't just affect you. Lots of people are affected by what you do....so think before you act. 
Written November 12th, 2005
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This was unlike some of the other suicide poems I've read. It's kinda like my name (Catalyst) You can set off a chain of events and ultimately change your future for good, or for worse. You demonstrated that fine line here and this was just something different to read. Great job and I wish I had enough points to give you to promote this.
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omg is that kid alright? i need to know more this so sad and i hope that that father rots in hell i mean you just don't ask your kid how to make a noose. this was so sad lisa but the message was very unique and shows a side of suicide that most people don't give a second thought to when they are planning for it. not to be a downer or anything but you made a small error in the 5th stanza 1st line other than that it was awesome and almost made me cry so good job
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the irony of this poem cannot be anything but true, aside of even your own author's comments. I know of at least two suicides from my own high school class within one year of graduation of 1973, one involving the murder of his father and subsequent suicide. might be that to these situations I could totally relate to circumstances of your poem, but moreso that the situations involving such situations seem to never change, everyone thinking it's not gonna be them.
really interesting and very well-written poem Nickin that doesn't step in as any outside influence except to describe the details much as any outsider, even news reporter might, but letting the images that any outsider, news reporter might leave aside. excellent piece of writing!
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Oh my god this is horrible. My uncle comitted suicide recently and I can feel the sadness of everyone...I didn't really know him that much but my whole family is really sad...I think it's so true that suicide doesn't just touch you, the problem is that many depressed people don't realize what they're worth and think everyone hates them anyway and if they kill themselves it will be better for everybody...so it's hard...anyway great write
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*sob* very good, very good... I like... quite a moving poem.
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very touching
This is truly a very touching poem that at this moment is making tears form in my eyes.It was written beautifully and flowed really well. You got your point across really well and I was touched.....thnaks for sharing this experience with us all....now I will think twice before I act or speak.
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This has to be one of the best poems I've read in awhile. And one of the most emotional poems too. Like Danny said, it smacks you in the face. Enter this in a contest and it's guarunteed you'll creme everybody.
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*Sniffle, Sniffle* . . . Well Lisa, this poem got to me. It's message was more than just clear, it basically hit you right smack-dab in the face. Great emotion and detail in this one Lis. I really felt the though and feeling you put into it. Great Job!! ArchAngel
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